Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think that it is a waste of time.
Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
In Kazakhstan, there is a concern in society about the importance of art subjects. The reason for this issue is that they occupy more than twenty-five percent of the time children spend studying at school as well as seems to bring little benefit. Some teachers think that these disciplines are critical to learn at school, but others claim that they are unproductive. This essay agrees with the idea that art is not beneficial for pupils for the following reasons.
The main reason why I think that art subjects carry no significance to pupils is that they hardly ever contribute to the development of successful career. Generally, graduates often go to work as either engineers or economists so it is critical for them to give a greater preference to studying more vocational subjects than music and literature. As a result, the replacement of art subjects with practical subjects will improve their career prospects. For example, as part of experiment in Karaganda city, some schools substituted art disciplines with vocational ones to see how fast their former students could find employment. The outcome exceeded their expectancy since the employers admitted their better qualifications than those with no change in their curriculum.
However, some teachers state that it is necessary for children to study art at school. The main arguments for this point of view is that art subjects help children better appreciate the beauty of the world. If schools decided to exclude art from school syllabus, then pupils would be aware of neither the beauty nor idea standing behind beautiful pictures, songs, and theatre plays. Consequently, they would develop a sense of inferiority to those with a considerable knowledge of art. Let us take some students from the former USSR, who they had not been taught art at school. They found it unpleasantly difficult to answer the questions of art asked by students from the USA.
In conclusion, even though some teaches advocate that students should study both art and other subjects, I think art should be replaced by more significant subjects so graduates can easily find jobs
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, so, then, well, for example, i think, in conclusion, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1780.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 346.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14450867052 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78820108454 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557803468208 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5522676862 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.25 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.625 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28414288267 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0987246906134 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0608741484608 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182232631513 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0324082791606 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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