Children today play very violent games. This must be the reason for the increase in violence and crime in most major cities of the world.
What are your opinions on this.
Nowadays, children usually play violent games. these games could be cruel video games like Battle Field, CrossFire,... or real games which take ideas from violent shows on the TV. In my opinion, this must be the reason for the increase in violence and crime in most major cities in the world.
children is on growing ages, so everything can affect their soul and characteristic. if they play too much games like what I said above, there will be many problems. it may not stop in entertainment, children could be obsessed by these games. A lot of times in real lifes, after playing violent games, children lose control their mind and fight with other people. Furthermore, if these things are not tackled early by their parents or teachers and happens day by day, it will play an important role in building their awareness in the future. they could be thieves, make dangerous traffic accidents, or hurt and kill normal people. When polices asked many young criminal why they had done things like that, they said they had done these things just because they thought these crimes were right in the games then right in the real lifes.
it is very important to solve these problems. we should prevent our children from violent games or a least teach them what is right in the games could be wrong in the real lifes. In another way, we may encourage them to play light sports like chess or table tennis. these sports not only help them healthy, but also give them a good awareness.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, so, then, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1221.0 1615.20841683 76% => OK
No of words: 260.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69615384615 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28025678508 2.80592935109 81% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.588461538462 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 357.3 506.74238477 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.7252024962 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.4 106.682146367 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3333333333 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.73333333333 7.06120827912 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264154196778 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101480833591 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.154103687153 0.0667982634062 231% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208392778118 0.151304729494 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.159480579102 0.056905535591 280% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 13.0946893788 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 50.2224549098 142% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 12.4159519038 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 78.4519038076 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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