While most of the environmental problems that we face result from the use of technology, society must depend upon technology to find solutions to these problems.
The subject statement can be divided into two parts. The first part claims that most of the environmental problems are a result of the use of technology and the second part claims that in order to solve those environmental problems, society must depend upon technology to find solutions to those problems. I agree with both parts of the statement and my agreement with the statement can be understood well as I discuss it in the subsequent paragraphs.
I agree that most of the environmental problems that we face result from the use of technology. This statement is particularly true in today's modern industrial society. The technology that we developed in the 20th century does not work in harmony with the environment. It causes some form of damage to the environment. For example, the automobiles that were developed during the industrial revolution run on gasoline and diesel and produced air pollutants such as carbon dioxide, carbon monoxide and nitrous oxide. The early refrigerators and air conditioners used CFCs as cooling agent that damages the Earth's protective Ozone layer. The plastic used in the packaging industry does not breakdown naturally for thouands of years and therefore is accumulates as piles of garbage. Each of these technologies return some form of pollutant back to the environment or damage the environment in some other way. However, if we develop technology that works in balance with the environment, we might be able to deal with our current environmental problems.
During the late 20th century, when scientists and politicians became aware about the environmental problems that the society was facing, they took important decisions to tackle and solve those problems. For example, when scientists discovered the hole in the Ozone layer caused by the use of CFCs in refrigerators and ACs, they developed alternate freezing agents to replace the CFCs. Additionally, many corporations and government politicians took steps to implement this new technology and ultimately the society, by working collectively and using new technology, was able to find solution to an environmental problem that was caused as a result of the use of technology. In current time, scientists and engineers are developing electric vehicles and biodegradable alternatives to plastics to solve two of the most critical environmental problems - global warming and plastic pollution - both of which are a result of the use of the use of non-envvironment friendly technologies. And they already are on the path of success. Not only this, some scientists have developed the technology of carbon capture, as a way to reduce the amounts of carbon dioxide in the atmosphere and thus help prevent climate change.
It is evident that even though most environmental problems result from the use of technology, we can still develop and refine our technology to become most environment friendly and use it to solve these problems.
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| 2019-04-21 | Jake_Roberts | 75 | view |
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 516, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...w technology and ultimately the society, by working collectively and using new te...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, so, still, therefore, thus, well, for example, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2468.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 468.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2735042735 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09910543614 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470085470085 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 787.5 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 102.701367993 60.3974514979 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.111111111 118.986275619 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 23.4991977007 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.27777777778 5.21951772744 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.429588805691 0.243740707755 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126214352743 0.0831039109588 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.155838498298 0.0758088955206 206% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.285196125118 0.150359130593 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0657784900643 0.0667264976115 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 14.1392134831 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.8420337079 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 100.480337079 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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