Nowadays children have too much freedom. Some people think it may be dangerous in some aspects.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
it is an undeniable fact that change is an inevitable process. Our lives have been transformed in tremendous ways than the way it was used to be in the past. In today's era, some people believe that it is necessary to provide liberty to the children, while some other perceive that too much freedom is poisonous in some aspects. if question asked to me, i support the former view. The reasons for my notion are elucidated in the ensuing paragraphs.
The first argument, i shall put forth is that freedom is essential for development. In other words, it is hard for people to explore new technology, skills and etcetera if they will have constrains. parents ought to understand that their offsprings are the future generation of the country and therefore it is irrefutable that these young minds ought to have enough leeway to express and explore the world. Whats more, these young learners can try a plethora of activities and can decide their future based on their likes and dislikes. Subsequently, a better society can be constructed with skilled people.
Additionally, if wards are entitled to freedom then they can have strong bond with their families. it is due to the fact that children can convey their feelings and emotions to their guardians with an ease. this young class can openly tell their parents if something bothers them. it eventually creates friendly atmosphere in the family. To exemplify this, A survey was done by the Canadian Atlantic newspaper in 2009. The aim was to find the causes that make children safe, happy and confident. they conducted survey among 1000 families and found out that the children, who are not bound with any restriction are more confident, happy and full of zest. Hence, it is evident that freedom plays pivotal role in nurturing the youth.
some people, however, argue that the world is flooded with obscene information. if children are given too much freedom, then they can get their hands on such information. Consequently, it may create detrimental effects on their brains. Furthermore, if they come in contact with bad influences, they can become notorious. Nevertheless, if parents monitor their offsprings activities, the mentioned drawback can be avoided.
In the end, I pen down by concluding that though there are some negative aspects of too much liberty, it can be easily avoided by their parents being proactive and friendly. The merits which freedom gives cannot be overshadowed by the drawbacks.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, then, therefore, while, as to, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 13.1623246493 213% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 24.0651302605 208% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2065.0 1615.20841683 128% => OK
No of words: 409.0 315.596192385 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0488997555 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72182162502 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 176.041082164 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559902200489 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 620.1 506.74238477 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 5.43587174349 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 16.0721442886 156% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.4147180632 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.6 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.36 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.88 7.06120827912 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.01903807615 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166839120841 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0449364515164 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0524307018349 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10735011842 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052537201874 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.0946893788 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.