Some people think that people who choose a job early and keep doing it are more likely to have a satisfying career life than those who frequently change jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is important for young people to decide on what career they want to pursue during their life. Many people believe that staying in a job will get more satisfactory than switching jobs. In my opinion, I agree with this view and my reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs.
There is no denying that we cannot succeed if we are not patient in our career path. Long-time employees would gain advanced skills in their works and quickly become expert in their fields. Thus they would feel pleased and proud about their work. Besides once people become professional in their works they will get promotion opportunities. In some countries such as Korea and Japan, the loyalty is always appreciated so company would consider promoting people who have long contribution than people who have outstanding performance. When people have principle position in their organization they will get higher salary and that allows them have better life. This is where the job satisfactory comes from.
Staying in a same job would bring some benefits. Many companies offer special benefits for people who work in long term. For example, people who work longer than five years would be added one day to their annual leave. Company may give retention allowance to thank to employee’s contribution. Moreover, people who work long time in a company can build a wide and steady network of partners. Therefore, they always receive supports from their colleagues. As the result, their work can be completed with less difficulty and that would bring them to job pleasure
In conclusion, I totally agree that staying in one job in long term would bring many job opportunities and benefits which will provide people job fulfillment.
- Some people think that people who choose a job early and keep doing it are more likely to have a satisfying career life than those who frequently change jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 61
- 2.It is neither possible nor useful for a country to provide university places for a high proportion of young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 61
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Thus,
... quickly become expert in their fields. Thus they would feel pleased and proud about...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd that would bring them to job pleasure In conclusion, I totally agree that stay...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1447.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09507042254 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66986635841 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.566901408451 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 427.5 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.1728916026 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.1176470588 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7058823529 20.7667163134 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11764705882 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227331708768 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0775738441596 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0673396414958 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152937112111 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0255540229384 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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