The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company.
"According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies than in any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actually increased during the past year. Clearly, the contents of these reviews are not reaching enough of our prospective viewers. Thus, the problem lies not with the quality of our movies but with the public's lack of awareness that movies of good quality are available. Super Screen should therefore allocate a greater share of its budget next year to reaching the public through advertising".
According to the memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company, the reason that the number of moviegoers decrease is because of the fact that people don't know anything about the good review of the movies. The author believed that they could absorb more viewer for movies by allocating more money only for advertising and not the quality of movies. But before proving that conclusion, there is many questions to answer.
First of all, why movie production company believe that advertising and letting people know about critics positive point of view could promote movies? Based on previous experience, there were so many movies with a huge investment on advertising but they didn't get enough attention at their time. If this premise is true, the conclusion of advertising director of movie company could get change.
Secondly, how do they know the fact that putting large amount of money could work to absorb more prospective viewers to movies? Why do they think that the quality of movies don't matter as much as advertising? In recent year we could observe so many successful movies that could get so much accolade and attention only because of their high quality and even with a small amount of advertising.If This assumption is true then the whole course of this debate could be changed.
At third, Why do they think that people would like something that movie reviewers like? It is a fact that movie viewers watch the movies as a different point of view as the regular viewers. For instance you could remember so many movie that critics loved but the regular viewers didn't think that way. If we imagine that this supposition is plausible, then we have to rethink about the huge part of this debate.
Although that arguments, as it stands now is flawed but if the author could answer these question then it would be easier to make a deduction about this assumption.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 149, Rule ID: REASON_IS_BECAUSE[1]
Message: Probably an incorrect phrase. Use 'the reason 'is that''.
Suggestion: is that
... that the number of moviegoers decrease is because of the fact that people dont know anyth...
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Line 1, column 152, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
...at the number of moviegoers decrease is because of the fact that people dont know anything about the goo...
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Line 1, column 184, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ease is because of the fact that people dont know anything about the good review of ...
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Line 1, column 419, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are many questions'?
Suggestion: there are many questions
...es. But before proving that conclusion, there is many questions to answer. First of all, why movie ...
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Line 3, column 256, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...huge investment on advertising but they didnt get enough attention at their time. If ...
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Line 5, column 174, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...o they think that the quality of movies dont matter as much as advertising? In recen...
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Line 5, column 393, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: If
...even with a small amount of advertising.If This assumption is true then the whole ...
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Line 5, column 393, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...even with a small amount of advertising.If This assumption is true then the whole ...
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Line 7, column 226, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun movie seems to be countable; consider using: 'many movies'.
Suggestion: many movies
...ers. For instance you could remember so many movie that critics loved but the regular view...
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Line 7, column 280, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...t critics loved but the regular viewers didnt think that way. If we imagine that this...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, third, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1590.0 2260.96107784 70% => OK
No of words: 324.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90740740741 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48046014237 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481481481481 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 705.55239521 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.6988042253 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.571428571 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1428571429 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.70786347227 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197637336443 0.218282227539 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0761926508531 0.0743258471296 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0847387599514 0.0701772020484 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113248771687 0.128457276422 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0851556084382 0.0628817314937 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 98.500998004 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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