Describe a problem with the equipment you bought recently and how you want the problem solved. Write a letter to the company

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Describe a problem with the equipment you bought recently and how you want the problem solved. Write a letter to the company

Dear sir/madam,
I am writing to make a formal complain about the equipment I bought recently from your company.

I purchased a Dell laptop, model number 3450x , from your Lagos Island Showroom, on the 15th of June, 2019. The Sales Manager, specifically guaranteed that it was the best and the latest model there was to buy, but to my utmost disgust, it had not perform as expected. I am having issues with the network adapter and find it extremely difficult to connect to any Internet Service provider. Neither am I able to connect to my office network group through any of the available WiFi.

This issue is affecting me adversely, because it has affected my productivity and my task delivery dates. I received a warning mail from my boss and I need to get this problem fixed soonest.

I want you to send one of your Technicians across to me, to come and have a look and get it fixed within the next 24-hours. He should also come with a spare laptop that is functional that I can use temporarily while mine is being repaired.Otherwise, I would be left with no other alternative than to request for a replacement or a full refund of the equipment.

Yours faithfully,

Oluwunmi Bajo

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 46, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...chased a Dell laptop, model number 3450x , from your Lagos Island Showroom, on the...
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Line 4, column 97, Rule ID: COMMA_MONTH_DATE[1]
Message: The comma is probably incorrect: 'June 2019'.
Suggestion: June 2019
...r Lagos Island Showroom, on the 15th of June, 2019. The Sales Manager, specifically guaran...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 249, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'performed'.
Suggestion: performed
...y, but to my utmost disgust, it had not perform as expected. I am having issues with th...
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Line 8, column 240, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Otherwise
...emporarily while mine is being repaired.Otherwise, I would be left with no other alternat...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, while, as to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 990.0 937.175257732 106% => OK
No of words: 210.0 206.0 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71428571429 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80675409584 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83634144199 2.54303337028 112% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 127.690721649 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.666666666667 0.622605031667 107% => OK
syllable_count: 309.6 290.88556701 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 16.3608247423 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.9875446647 44.8134815571 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.0 76.5299724578 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 16.8248392259 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.11111111111 4.34317383033 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.49484536082 334% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118046547338 0.216113520407 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0416979694882 0.0766984524023 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046601097062 0.0603063233224 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0750609230481 0.12726935374 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0534256058841 0.0580467560999 92% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 8.37731958763 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 70.7449484536 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 7.45979381443 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 8.71597938144 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 7.59969072165 119% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 41.2886597938 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 8.54432989691 131% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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