During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurant.
In letter,
-Remind him when and where you met
-tell him what kind of job you are interested in
-say why you think you would be suitable for the job
Dear Mr. Chris,
I am writing with regard to our last meeting on a flight about a job opportunity.
Coincidently we sat together on an airplane from Toronto to London on 22nd April. It was the newspaper report which made us talk. I really enjoyed your company and learned a lot from your business perspective.
You spoke about a team leader job available for me. I would be happy to work in a business management role. Duties related to managing a workforce and designing policies are my best traits. And I think your line of work will be an asset to my experience.
I have completed Masters in Business Strategy and Management from IBA London. I am working in a renowned restaurant chain since last 3 years and duties are of the same nature as required by your company. I have also been honored by the best leadership award from my current employer which shows my commitment to work.
I would be more than happy to be working with your company. I look forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
Ahsan Abid.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 205, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ame nature as required by your company. I have also been honored by the best lead...
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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... which shows my commitment to work. I would be more than happy to be working ...
^
Line 11, column 61, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... happy to be working with your company. I look forward to your reply. Yours si...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, look, really, so, i think, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 32.9175257732 79% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 845.0 937.175257732 90% => OK
No of words: 181.0 206.0 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66850828729 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66791821706 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6333371907 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 127.690721649 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.635359116022 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 262.8 290.88556701 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 16.3608247423 73% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.7396790882 44.8134815571 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 60.3571428571 76.5299724578 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.9285714286 16.8248392259 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.35714285714 4.34317383033 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0511012663977 0.216113520407 24% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.019143964061 0.0766984524023 25% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0417962290474 0.0603063233224 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0295502346474 0.12726935374 23% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0247452744731 0.0580467560999 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.0 8.37731958763 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 70.7449484536 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.92 8.71597938144 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 7.59969072165 105% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 8.62886597938 64% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.8 8.54432989691 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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