In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting unit studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.
Young people in certain nations are usually motivated to either engage themselves in doing some jobs or go for tours for one year before beginning their university studies once they complete college. Definitely, the decision made by these students have both positive and negative effects on them and the society as a whole. This will be discussed in my essay.
For students to be encouraged in take up some jobs before furthering higher institutions have benefits to their live. As this ,will help them to appreciate value for money. Has students have to face the challenges of each day at work and they must meet up with the expectations and the demand of the job. If they are paid salary at the end of the month, it will help to know how to plan and save from money earned,thus, preparing them to be responsible when they are fully matured. Such is seen in UK schools where there students take up jobs after completing high school. By so doing,they are learning the culture of culture of how to work hard and have extra savings from the money relearn. More so, reason for encouraging students to go for tours after secondary school is That, it exposes them to know how things are been done in other culture such as having privilege to see how food is been prepared and how its taste, for example,a Nigeria students that travelled to China will see their delicacy. Again,they can also pick one or two Chinese language for easy communication with people around.
On the other hand,giving young people the motivation to work or go for journeys before moving on to higher education also have demerits effect on them. Because some of the students may not what to continue with their education again. Since they have been exposed to how to make money at early stage in life. They might decide continue with the work, hence making them half educated. Furthermore,leaving them to go for tourism may also exposed them to some bad peer influence like smoking and drinking alcohol. If such is accepted in the country they are going to. As there may be no laws or regulations guiding against this.
To conclude with,certainly there are benefits as well as disadvantaged of encouraging young people to work or travel once they complete high school as it will help them to know how to save money but it will exposed them to some bad peer influence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, if, may, second, so, thus, well, for example, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 7.0 257% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 1.00243902439 1197% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 6.8 206% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 5.60731707317 660% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 33.7804878049 204% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1930.0 965.302439024 200% => OK
No of words: 410.0 196.424390244 209% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70731707317 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 3.73543355544 120% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58762441613 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 106.607317073 194% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50487804878 0.547539520022 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 613.8 283.868780488 216% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 1.07073170732 560% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 8.94146341463 212% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.8472555614 43.030603864 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.578947368 112.824112599 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5789473684 22.9334400587 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05263157895 5.23603664747 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 1.69756097561 1060% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 3.70975609756 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 1.13902439024 527% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239134781302 0.215688989381 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.076298704117 0.103423049105 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.065337297663 0.0843802449381 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175277152049 0.15604864568 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0319293256974 0.0819641961636 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.2329268293 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 61.2550243902 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 11.4140731707 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 40.7170731707 192% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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