At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.
Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
In recent years, it is clear that in some territories, the number of young adults has surpassed that of senior citizens. Although there are several drawbacks which may derive from this situation, I still believe that the merits are greater.
As the population of some nations has become younger, a number of disadvantages may occur in terms of economic and societal aspects. In a working place, the decrease in older staff means that there are more inexperienced workers which leads to uncertainty in the management system. For example, young chief executive officers find it hard to manage a company effectively because they do not have sufficient psychologic knowledge as well as interpersonal skills. Furthermore, youngsters need more time to enable themselves to build their confidence and cope with stress in the hectic life. Otherwise, the risk of conflicts in working places or daily activities can be higher than that of the older.
Nevertheless, it is also obvious that the younger the citizens are, the faster the nation develop. A typical example is that when Japan was considered to be the young-population nation in the last decade, its development pace surpassed its neighbor countries, while it has slowed down recently and it is predicted that the economy there will hardly accelerate in the next ten years because of the higher average age. Moreover, the young generation is flexible, dynamic, creative and adaptable. As a consequence, more invention and innovation can be put into practice so as to enhance the living quality and boost the wealth of some specific nations.
In conclusion, although having a relatively large number of youngsters in one country has its pros and cons, I believe that the one with high average age develops in a traditional way is good, but another with younger age on average is still better.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, well, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1553.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14238410596 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89357938054 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605960264901 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.3224374418 49.4020404114 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.416666667 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1666666667 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5 7.06120827912 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196015720227 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0604705142539 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514642989749 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110455926102 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0374282051422 0.056905535591 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.58 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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