The following appeared in a recommendation from the planning department of the city of Transopolis.
"Ten years ago, as part of a comprehensive urban renewal program, the city of Transopolis adapted for industrial use a large area of severely substandard housing near the freeway. Subsequently, several factories were constructed there, crime rates in the area declined, and property tax revenues for the entire city increased. To further revitalize the city, we should now take similar action in a declining residential area on the opposite side of the city. Since some houses and apartments in existing nearby neighborhoods are currently unoccupied, alternate housing for those displaced by this action will be readily available."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The appearance of a recommendation given by the planning department of the city of Transopolis for urban renewal program states that occupancy of an area for industrial use in the opposite side of the city will revitalise the city based on the earlier similar action taken 10 years ago which brought in prosperity in terms of new construction of factories, decline in crime rates and increase in property tax. This recommendation does not make a cogent case since it is rife with holes and unwarranted assumption. Therefore, before this recommendation can be properly evaluated, following three evidences must be collected.
First of all, the evidence which may prove that the area occupied earlier 10 years ago and the area which planning department is recommending to occupy are same in all respects. In other words, conditions of these areas in terms of socio-economic status of denizens, industrial status, and reform plan executed earlier, if any, crime statistics and tax revenue must be same, since if any of these characteristics are different in some manner, it may not lead to desired result. For instance, the area occupied earlier might have not have single industry earlier, but may be because of its location near to the sea ports or airports, industrial houses established their presence for easiness of exports. However, the area which planning department is recommending to occupy may fall in the location to which there is no direct pathway to these ports or airports, therefore, the presence of industrial houses in future will be in doubt. Moreover, it is incorrect to assume that these occupation resulted in increase in property taxes since it is possible that property tax rate was high ten years ago and after acquiring it for industrial use, property tax revenue increase, while, the tax rate in the planned area may be zero or at very low point and to promote industry, authorities reduced the existing tax rates, therefore, it may not leading to higher tax revenues. If any of these examples were true, then the recommendation does not hold water.
Secondly, the evidence is required in terms of discussion or dialogue with the residents of the planned area which can stated that these residents are willing to relocate to the nearby area where existing houses are unoccupied. And the conditions of these unoccupied houses are conducive to living. In other words, it is required that planning department to have some deliberations regarding the shifting of current residents to the new houses without protest or backlash. For instance, it may happen that area occupied earlier was not conducive to living because of no civic amenities, therefore, denizens of this area relocated to new locations willingly. However, if the residents of this planned area are unwilling to relocate because of their jobs or means of living present in this area only, then this recommendation may lead to massive protest across the city. Moreover, it may happen that residents displaced earlier were given houses replete with all housing and civic amenities and future source to earn money to make the living. However, if the conditions of the unoccupied houses are not conducive in terms of its dilapidated conditions, no source of earning the livelihood and it is in some remote locations, residents may not like to move these houses. If, any of the examples has merit, recommendation given by the planning department is significantly weakened.
Third, evidence is required to prove that people currently living in the planned area are responsible for substandard city and they would change once move to new locations. In other words, it is assumed that if these people are relocated to new locations, industrial houses will be established here which will bring in new smart people that will make the city vigorous. For instance, it is assumed that the earlier decision of displacing the people to new location resulted in establishment of industrial houses and decline in crime rates, made an indirect relation to these people responsible for the crimes. However, it may happen that the residents of these new planned area are good citizen and have propriety and the crime rates are already at nadir, therefore, their displacement may not result further reduction in crime rates. Moreover, it is also assumed that earlier displacement had not resulted in another substandard area where residents were relocated. However, it may happen that residents which were relocated to a new location are leading to substandard life in this new area where crime rates are increasing at unprecedented level. Unless the recommendation is fully representative, valid and reliable, it cannot be used to back the idea of planning department.
In conclusion, the recommendation, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumption. If the planning department is able to provide the above evidences and offer more documents, perhaps in the form of types of industries to be established, tax policy for the area and industrial policy for the area, then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the proposed recommendation.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
No. of Words: 841 350
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 841 350
No. of Characters: 4243 1500
No. of Different Words: 294 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.385 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.045 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.865 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 300 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 244 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 187 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 116 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 32.346 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.33 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.846 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.318 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.497 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.085 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 977, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this occupation' or 'these occupations'?
Suggestion: this occupation; these occupations
...oreover, it is incorrect to assume that these occupation resulted in increase in property taxes ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, while, for instance, in conclusion, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 46.0 19.6327345309 234% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 26.0 12.9520958084 201% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 25.0 11.1786427146 224% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 26.0 13.6137724551 191% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 28.8173652695 201% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 120.0 55.5748502994 216% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 39.0 16.3942115768 238% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4343.0 2260.96107784 192% => OK
No of words: 841.0 441.139720559 191% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16409036861 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.38516480713 4.56307096286 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95283525791 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 315.0 204.123752495 154% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.374554102259 0.468620217663 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1417.5 705.55239521 201% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 4.96107784431 282% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.70958083832 332% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 32.0 22.8473053892 140% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.4043517799 57.8364921388 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 167.038461538 119.503703932 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.3461538462 23.324526521 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42307692308 5.70786347227 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228159457632 0.218282227539 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0703643797933 0.0743258471296 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0717123264321 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15953020956 0.128457276422 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0853527434789 0.0628817314937 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.0 14.3799401198 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.54 48.3550499002 63% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 12.197005988 139% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.24 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 173.0 98.500998004 176% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 12.3882235529 161% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.1389221557 133% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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