some people believed that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
It is generally argued that people should agree with their living condition; meanwhile, other dispel this notion, believing that they have to try their best to get over these situations. In my opinion, I believe that there are two sides to this issue.
One the one hand, it is a fact beyond dispute that there are some reasons for the first view point. Firstly, some people do not have good health for improving their life condition. To be specific, although some people really want to find a job that could bring them satisfactory, their physical possibility does not allow them to change their job. Secondly, the limit of their knowledge prevent people from opportunities to improve their life. In other words, people who do not have a good educational status are difficult to find a high salary job. As a result, people will accept their situations no matter how unsatisfied it is.
In the other hand, others’ support of the second viewpoint can be bolstered in several ways. First and foremost, it is characteristic of people that force them to improve their present situation. That is to say, some people never accept what they have and always try their best to make it better day by day by learning and working hard. Additionally, family condition is an important reason that motivate people to improve their life condition. A study has shown that people who are breadwinner are normally success than others because they have to try any way to improve their situation for raising their family.
To conclude then, in line with the previous discussion, I am convicted to assert that a person should not accept their situations and find a way to improve such unsatisfied condition.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'day by'.
Suggestion: day by
...always try their best to make it better day by day by learning and working hard. Additionally...
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Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...ondition. A study has shown that people who are breadwinner are normally success than o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, really, second, secondly, so, then, while, as a result, in my opinion, in other words, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1411.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91637630662 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62574476398 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547038327526 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 433.8 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.3804701416 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.785714286 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.64285714286 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233668437432 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0859757883755 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0314505179908 0.0667982634062 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145426642001 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0365280852918 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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