Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organized group activities in their free time. Other say that it is important for children to know how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
The way children should their leisure time has caused polarization among many people. Few people believe that children should be motivated by their parents to engage in a group activity while others say that children should learn to keep themselves occupied. This essay will examine both side of the arguments and explain why I support the former view.
The supporters of a solo activity advocate that in this hustle and bustle of contemporary life-styles it is imperative for children to be self-engaged as it provides them 'me-time' which is crucial for them to understand themselves. A child can explore himself in many ways by learning to occupy himself in his leisure time. To exemplify, a child may learn to cook on his own in his time-off giving him opportunity to experiment with different ingredients, various cuisines and recipes. Hence, to these supporters spending free time on their own can be rewarding as it results in finding skills they never think they have.
Others, however, myself included highlight that organised and well-structured activities with their peers have numerous benefits. Firstly, despite having difference in opinions, working with other members of a team and coach towards the same goal enhance the tolerance threshold of an individual which blatantly acts as a boon in adult life. Moreover, many group exercises strive to boost the self-confidence and creativity in children. For instance, a group of children asked to draw a painting based on a memory or to recite a monologue in 10 different ways has power to stimulate the brain, and achieving the task enhances self-esteem. Thus, working with other children in spare time can create positive ripples in terms of learning teamworking skills, magnifying the creativity and self-confidence.
To reiterate, although spending spare time without any playmates helps explore a child's interest, in my opinion, having group activities develop skills required to work in a team, intensify creativity and have a conctructive effect on the future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, thus, well, while, for instance, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1713.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 323.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30340557276 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95743915204 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597523219814 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.4935709238 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.769230769 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8461538462 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.76923076923 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290827647629 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0987234858283 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0855097318266 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171417219987 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114347112861 0.056905535591 201% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.47 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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