Claim: In any field — business, politics, education, government — those in power should step down after five years.
Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
While to keep a realm that no matter it is business, politics, education or government prosperous will be a very tough challenge task even to an experienced and skillful master, allowing the leader stay in his position for over five years might be a good opportunity, instead of harmful perspective that they will go to failure after five years. Despite politics and government field, leaders bring more benefits if they stay long.
Admittedly, in political arenas and government offices, leaders who are working for a long term could gather many rights and powers which allow them to commit corruption. Such as “politicians are liars”, “governors are the laziest persons” expressed the impression from citizens. Living by citizens’ tax and pursuing personal ambitions are typical bias to people who dedicated life to politics and governments. Because of the belief system’s gap between citizens and politicians, one of the stable and reliable ways to run government fairly are let politicians take a specific position no longer than five years. However, the same rule does not fit people who are expert and enterprise.
In the education field, scholars enjoy the tenure track in their career which helps them passion on researching and teaching. Although many experts are reported on languishing in teaching, their research needs decades’ endeavor. Imagine if a scholar only can keep his career in a university for five years, their work certainly will be damaged by rushing to publish or finding the next the job. The fruitful experiments conduct thousands of time will at the risk of vanish when the scholars’ five years’ work ended. Similarly, a successful businessman fighting for his product which represents his intelligent and strategic could not be taken back or replaced by other people after the fifth year. The spirit of the company will be damaged and workers and staffs will leave if they cannot get along with the new leaders. Many company’s CEOs are life-long position because of their leaderships and employees’ loyalty. The great company is more like a big family and everyone in the company working for the same goal and pursuing the same dream, such as Facebook, Google, and Amazon. The CEOs work for their own company for life long and the company extraordinarily keeps thriving.
Therefore, the five years path of revitalization works for the political field but not for business and education field. Politic depends on the different mode of work and keeps it clean and open by changing people in power. Instead, the education and business field which requires years endeavor and devotion should not be set with time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, similarly, so, therefore, while, as to, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 14.8657303371 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2275.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 431.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27842227378 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96379169983 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566125290023 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 694.8 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.5896098491 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.736842105 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6842105263 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.42105263158 5.21951772744 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150029946706 0.243740707755 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0481888464498 0.0831039109588 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0455975149856 0.0758088955206 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102922902663 0.150359130593 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.035547987392 0.0667264976115 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 100.480337079 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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