Do you agree or disagree with following statement, It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parent`s job than choose jobs that are very different from their parent`s job?
since after 1990s IMF, finance crisis, the opportunity that young or skilled workers are hard to find the chance to get in the job. even in the work place, anxiety of the fire and less chance of success cause insecure for the future. this situation getting worse. So that, I believe importance of skilled knowledge and abundant network from the parent is essential by choosing similar job of parent with few following reasons.
To begin with, children will obtain more realistic chance to get high value of knowledge from the parent. The skill and knowledge of the beginner which children have are premature. Some of the knowledge that children learned might wrong and require revision in the real work place. For their children, parents who had worked with skilled knowledge will teach and advise children if they have similar kind of job. For instance, during the time of the medieval period, it is hard to learn and be successful if they are not get in skilled artisan’s guild. Because the artisan only provides valuable experience which they get through whole life to their own members. this system is maintained since nowadays, having a similar job as parent will be great chance of getting invaluable experience and knowhow for the further success.
In addition, children naturally get advantage of the abundant network what parent had built. In the real work place, sturdy foundation of the network is important to get more opportunities and diverse skills of other experts. The father of mine is teacher who had taught math for 30 years. When I was young, everytime I met father’s friends and coworkers, most of them are the skilled teachers who were working as a teacher for a long time. As an assist of them, it is possible to get high grade in school since they educated me with their sufficient knowledges. Indeed, after I become a teacher father of mine and friends constantly advice about teaching and management skill that other beginners never know. through the subtraction and addition of the knowledge I gain, it is possible to achieve rapid success than other beginner who start the teacher with me.
For the conclusion, even if people can get the enough knowledge from the diverse source of material, the quality of information and skill from the parent who worked for at least decades of years will totally different than the common skills. Furthermore, the valuable sufficient network through the parent will boost and remain the prominent fundamental for success.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, so, at least, for instance, in addition, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2101.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03836930456 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56607946946 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503597122302 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 628.2 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.243612245 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.05 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.85 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25153200184 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0770768840999 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0833528788707 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164574208484 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0670610105961 0.0645574589148 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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