You saw an advert asking for volunteers to run a charity event:
1. Explain why you are interested in helping
2. give details suitable past experience
3. suggest ways you might help with the event
Dear Sir,
I am writing to express my interest for the position of Advertising co-ordinator for the cancer awareness marathon event published in the Times newspaper on 12 March, 2019.
I am a graduate student in Business Administration and I have been assigned to work on a public event as a final year project. Working with your team, I would like to learn project management and experience the challenges involved in handling large scale events. In addition, an opportunity to be part of such a noble cause is truly motivating.
I have worked as a Marketing Manager in the past for 2 years with a sports shoe manufacturing company. I have used advertising techniques, tele-marketing, and online promotion to a great extend. Therefore, I believe I would be value addition to your team.
If given an opportunity to work with you, I would extensively use the Internet to promote this event on all social platforms such as Instagram, and Facebook, to ensure it reaches to maximum number of audiences. I hope this will serve the purpose of creating cancer awareness and encourage people of all ages to participate in marathon.
I hope to discuss this opportunity with you in person. Thank you for considering my application.
Yours faithfully,
Nilesh Shah
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir, I am writing to express my interest for ...
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Line 2, column 161, Rule ID: COMMA_MONTH_DATE[1]
Message: The comma is probably incorrect: 'March 2019'.
Suggestion: March 2019
... published in the Times newspaper on 12 March, 2019. I am a graduate student in Business...
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Line 4, column 174, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to project'
Suggestion: to project
...g with your team, I would like to learn project management and experience the challenge...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, therefore, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.03092783505 0% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 32.9175257732 70% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 26.3917525773 129% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1063.0 937.175257732 113% => OK
No of words: 210.0 206.0 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0619047619 4.54256449028 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80675409584 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12455348284 2.54303337028 123% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 127.690721649 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.619047619048 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 339.3 290.88556701 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.2726216947 44.8134815571 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5833333333 76.5299724578 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 16.8248392259 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 4.34317383033 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175480668725 0.216113520407 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0611040356021 0.0766984524023 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0611910613505 0.0603063233224 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104710636122 0.12726935374 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0597940559642 0.0580467560999 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 8.37731958763 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 70.7449484536 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 8.71597938144 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.52 7.59969072165 125% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 41.2886597938 162% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 8.62886597938 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.