There is little justification for society to make extraordinary efforts—especially at a great cost in money and jobs—to save endangered animal or plant species
In the statement, the speaker claims that contributing huge amount of efforts, which can lead to reduce in job opportunities and loss in money, to save the endangered species is not worthwhile. For most of the cases, I think the author's claim is justifiable, with only a few exceptions in which human must contribute to the plan of save species from extinction for the following reasons.
First of all, I agree with the statement under the assumption that there is no or vague evidence that can indicate resources, such as human, time and money, spent on saving those endangered species can actually revitalize their overall population. In reality, because of lack of data about their living conditions and preferred habitats, very few detailed plans can be made to effectively save the endangered species with the resources, which can be used more efficiently in other fields, such as educations, we have. we might pour millions of dollars and loss hundreds of local jobs or loss lives in the process of a badly planned conservation action. consider a plan, which may consume millions of dollars that can otherwise be spent on expanding school facilities, that was designed to save an endangered species of bird, for example. if such a species of bird is not well studied, the plans would not likely be designed thoroughly. The lack of consideration may lead to duplicated spending such as over-qualified personnel employment, and all these potential wastes can be used for plans for education more efficiently. therefore, because of the lack of knowledge about these endangered species, spending huge amount of precious social resources is going to yield amateur plans, which are going to cause overall waste.
Furthermore, even assuming that well-studied plans can be made to save these endangered species efficiently, we must also consider their competitiveness in their natural environment. In another words, the process of natural selection is another element that we must consider before we make extraordinary efforts to save them. if certain species lacks some critical functions to survive in the wild, saving them would only introduce a blackhole that may consume infinite amount of resources without contributing any benefit to the human society. Hypothetically, consider a species of deer has defect in their eyesight, this defect will naturally make them become endangered or even extinct because of lack of ability to spot predators. any efforts that will bring this species of deer back to prosperity would only mean that such species is not suitable for any environment except that under human control. After all, it would not make much sense to save a species that can only survive under the help of human, and such conservation activity would only mean a huge resource pit that will not contribute anything.
On the other hand, I concede that there are some situations that human should devote much effort to save some endangered species, especially the reason for their endangerment comes from human and the benefit from the conservation action greatly overshadows the costs. because of human activities, such as deforestation, excessive pollution from factories, certain species become endangered from the reasons of loss of desirable habitats, shortage of food supplies and increase of global temperatures. More importantly, many of those species provides elements that are critical to the normal functioning of human society, such as sustainable food supplies. consider bees, for example; while they may not be categorized as endangered, their activities and population are definitely threatened by human factors such as pollution. bees not only provides us with honey, but they are also an important species in spreading pollens for plant like wheat, which is critical in providing adequate food supplies to human. therefore, designing a conservation for species like bees, even as cost of losing job opportunities and huge resource spending is worthwhile since its endangerment is cause by human and the benefit for saving those species greatly outruns the cost.
In a nutshell, we would put the precious human, money and time resources at the risk of inefficient utilization if we decided to save every endangered species without discretion. only when a species is well-studied and the benefit of conservation greatly outruns the cost should we plan such actions to save them, even at the risk of losing jobs and money.
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...n at the risk of losing jobs and money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, after all, for example, i think, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 28.0 12.4196629213 225% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.3162921348 203% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 51.0 33.0505617978 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 98.0 58.6224719101 167% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3745.0 2235.4752809 168% => OK
No of words: 712.0 442.535393258 161% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25983146067 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.16559078211 4.55969084622 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90652265205 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 302.0 215.323595506 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.424157303371 0.4932671777 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1180.8 704.065955056 168% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 40.7675414829 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 162.826086957 118.986275619 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.9565217391 23.4991977007 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5652173913 5.21951772744 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 7.80617977528 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271334308952 0.243740707755 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0897426005372 0.0831039109588 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0545060863091 0.0758088955206 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174802741242 0.150359130593 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.036498950494 0.0667264976115 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 14.1392134831 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.57 48.8420337079 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.1743820225 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.82 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 160.0 100.480337079 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 11.8971910112 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.7820224719 161% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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