Do you agree or disagree that young people enjoy life more than older people do ??
Everyone has the equal right to enjoy their life, it doesn’t matter about the age or something. For me I don’t agree that youngster enjoy life more than elderly do. In my opinion, it might be more precise to say that we as human have the obligation to live our life more enjoyable and valuable. there are some reasons why I disagree with the statement.
Firstly, as a youth we all face the process of becoming adulthood, there’s no doubt that we will eventually meet lots of pressure from family or work. While getting old and older, there are piles of stress from far and wide, and those seem to be the reason young people could not enjoy life more than older people. For instance, the work. After graduating from college, it also means the phase of becoming adulthood and we start to get a stable job to uphold our family, however, sometimes the heavy workload from the supervisors might overwhelmed by the workers , what’s more the salary we earn might not afford to uphold the family even ourselves this may cause the financial pressure.
Secondly, the entertainment. Although young people seem to have more spare time to enjoy their life, however, as I mentioned in the last paragraph, they still have to uphold their family and themselves, most of their money where contribute to these two parts, also, if they don’t get much money from work, they won’t have another money to spend on entertainment.
In short, as the age growing young people will face lots of things and need to uphold lots of responsibilities, it is not as superficial as we seem. there are also many potential factors we don’t know. All in all, I don’t think that young people enjoy life more than old people do.
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- TPO 37 Integrated essay 3
- tpo 37 3
- Do you agree or disagree that young people enjoy life more than older people do 85
- Do you agree or disagree that it is important to increase the time primary school students spend on technologies such as computers through reducing the time taken up by art and music courses? 60
- Do you think that students today are more interested in politics than in the past 52
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, while, for instance, in short, no doubt, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1438.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 299.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80936454849 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64307060485 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548494983278 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 102.233634271 48.9658058833 209% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 110.615384615 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.84615384615 5.45110844103 181% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321766838011 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121442209386 0.076458572812 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.146326759332 0.0737576698707 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207181501237 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.09490662146 0.0645574589148 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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