The main reason for going to the shopping mall will be for entertainment not to shop. Do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, you can easily find a shopping mall. It attaches so many people. They often go there for main purpose of shopping or amusement. Some people believe that they go shopping mall only for relaxing. In this essay, I will emphasize three reasons that shopping goal can outdo entertainment.
First of all, people do not have time, they save time to shop, not entertain when they go to the shopping mall. For example, most people have to work from Monday to Friday and children must go to school everyday except Sunday. At weekends, many people enjoy spending time with family at home instead of entertaining in the shopping mall. Furthermore, some people do not like animation, they prefer relaxing in their house to going to shopping mall. They can read book, watch television or cook.They just go there when they really need to buy something.
In addition, goods should be checked qualitatively. Although online shopping is more popular but many people still enjoy traditional shopping. For instance, when you buy clothes, at the mall you can try on, check the size, quality, colour of clothes and get advice on products from shop assistants. For other goods such as vegetable, fish or meat, you need to make sure that they are fresh food.
By way of conclusion, entertainment can not replace the main function of a shopping mall, a place for people to shop. However, shopping malls will continue to expand their areas for entertainment activities to draw more customers, but customers will never go to a shopping mall just for entertainment.
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...can read book, watch television or cook.They just go there when they really need to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, really, so, still, as for, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1292.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 261.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95019157088 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67621161362 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.590038314176 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 385.2 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.7180816125 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.75 106.682146367 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3125 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.625 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.50704361661 0.244688304435 207% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.181123860266 0.084324248473 215% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120580398836 0.0667982634062 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.353722893049 0.151304729494 234% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116248557521 0.056905535591 204% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 78.4519038076 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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