A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position
The choice of curriculum desired for a nation must be clearly defined. Weather a curriculum should be uniform or not depends on a number of factors which must be considered carefully. For insatnce, a nation which has once experience civil war in her history must as a matter of nation building adopt a uniform curriculum in areas such as history and civil education. This is necessary to keep her citizen abreast of the difference in cultural beliefs and also to foster understanding. Also, a uniform curriculum in these subjects presents an opportunity to preserve the memoir of such civil war, enabling future generations to understand the pains that are associated with lack of tolerance.
A uniform curriculum is also desirable when students rarely offer some subjects. For instance, if univeristies in a country offer some courses and have people study and graduate from these courses. A lack of enrollment in such subjects at high school level may leave a number of graduates jobless as they are not able to apply for teaching positions due to the lack of interest and low turnout of students that enrol in these subjects at high school level. Since it is the responbililty of a responsbile government to provide job for her citizenry, adopting a uniform curriculum can increase the number of students enrolling in such neglected subjects since the subjects are avaible on the uniform curriculum and must be offered by all schools.
However, when time is a constriant, adopting a uniform curriculum may be disastrous. The fact that many students will enroll in subjects that are not revelent to their desired course of study at college level implies that students will spend more credit hours in classes they do not need. For instance, if the total credit hours required for graduation is 120 credit hours in a duration of 6 years of high school, translating to an average of 20 credit hours per year. If a compulsory but not necesssary subject takes 20 credit hour throughout the duration of high school, this implies that a student has wasted an academic year offering a subject that is not revelant to his or her career.
Conclusively, a unform curriculum may be desirable for nation building and job creation, the time wastage that come with such choice is detrimental to the time it takes a student to build a successful career.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 223, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'experienced'.
Suggestion: experienced
.... For insatnce, a nation which has once experience civil war in her history must as a matt...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun enrollment seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lack of enrollments'.
Suggestion: A lack of enrollments
... study and graduate from these courses. A lack of enrollment in such subjects at high school level m...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... level. Since it is the responbililty of a responsbile government to provide job ...
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Line 9, column 529, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'hour' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'hours'.
Suggestion: hours
... not necesssary subject takes 20 credit hour throughout the duration of high school,...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ration of high school, this implies that a student has wasted an academic year of...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...o his or her career. Conclusively, a unform curriculum may be desirable for ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1960.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 395.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96202531646 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82226367444 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 215.323595506 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.470886075949 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.972770891 60.3974514979 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.0 118.986275619 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2142857143 23.4991977007 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85714285714 5.21951772744 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161845735498 0.243740707755 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0633043585615 0.0831039109588 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0400568145044 0.0758088955206 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103879864801 0.150359130593 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0312952911471 0.0667264976115 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.1392134831 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.8420337079 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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