TPO32- Independent Writing-
Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?
As technology grows, every aspect of our lives becomes different. our world changes quickly, and people have to adapt to these changes as far as they can. However, young people can adjust themselves better because they can realize and understand better than their parents. when it comes to influencing the significant decisions of society, I firmly believe that youngsters today have not a strong impact because of the reasons I will elaborate.
First, youngsters today are more materialistic than ever before. they believe that money is everything, and the wealth of life lies in their financial situation. they see their parents and their miserable life. they are just working to provide their pupils with a suitable life. hence, they have realized that nothing is valuable than the money, and they have to try hard to earn it. this reality leads them not to ignore them wherever they face. they do not vote for any election or work as a volunteer because they know that this will not bring them money in return.
Second, technology has changed the way young people think. With the advancement of technology, young people are more attracted to the novel innovations are mostly involved in trying them. The youngsters, today, are living a hectic life because they always play or work with their mobile phone. Also, most of their valuable time is spared with these types of technological devices. hence, they have no time to contribute to any relevant decision of their society or even have never heard of these types of news.
Meanwhile, youngsters are the future hopes of the community. it is crucial to firmly state that young people have their significant contribution to most of the decisions of the society as a whole. As they grow, they start to shape their community by trying the technological advances and letting the governmental people know which types of these technologies play an essential role in the future of the country. Take my country, for instance. it is our young people whom they determined the importance of using social media to distribute the first-hand news in society, on time, compared to the old-fashioned way via the TV news. this led our people more alerted when one disastrous occurrence like an earthquake happens.
All in all, although young people may not have involved in the vital decision of their country because of their ultimate goal like being wealthy, and messed up with technological advances, they are the way some important decisions are established.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, second, so, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2106.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0625 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64711272144 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504807692308 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.5016209143 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5652173913 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0869565217 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.21739130435 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189613117357 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0579358884542 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595697147676 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123033750101 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0473509021087 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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