It is suggested that all young adults should undertake a period of unpaid work, helping people in the community. Does it bring more benefits or drawbacks to the young people?
It have been claimed that if adolescents pledge a period of time to work and help other people like a volunteer, it can be good for the whole society. Although, initially, it may seem simple, writing about this complex and controversial subject is not very convenient, because there are multifarious facts and dimensions affecting this subject. Even though some folks might not appreciate the idea of working unpaid, but to me having a short duration in an occupation without any salary might have its own merits. To illustrate my perspective of the topic, I will vindicate two reasons in the following article.
The first significant fact that is worth to point out is that in any societies there are lots of pauper and feeble persons which need a lot of help due to their lives, and by some volunteers they can have a better life. For example there are lots of skills which can be used in these situations, such as cookery, psychology, dentistry, medicine, etc. So it is an indisputable fact that working non salary has lots of benefits, despite it has a few negative point too. Because not gaining money for a long time make rich people into poor one.
In approaching this issue, apart from the fact mentioned above, one should consider another subtle point meticulously that objectively, pass a vocational duration before the real job, can also be helpful. In this case it can be exemplify this aspect that for any skill or work opportunity, after being knowledgeable, the most significant thing is experience. So the more experience you have, the more successful you could be.
As a result, it can be reiterated that, voluntarily working not only has lots of benefits for other people but also can help the individuals themselves to have more proper job situations.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, apart from, for example, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1484.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91390728477 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79521196816 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612582781457 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.7621067588 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.666666667 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1666666667 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11795715085 0.244688304435 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0456115194476 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0481417619318 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0835972961982 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.039979483964 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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