Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign country.
People strive to prepare fun time for themselves and their families in order to reduce the stress and tension that they have faced lives. One of the predominant things that individuals contemplate in this regard is travelling. However it is a controversial issue that which kind of travel provide more benefit for people. Some people believe travelling to foreign countries is better than traveling in their own country. I disagree with this idea, and I think if ones travel in their native country, they benefit more. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my view point.
Firstly, people would enhance their knowledge toward their country's and their ancestor culture since they travel in their own country. It is obvious that everyone acquire to know about their culture for having a good insight into how was the history of his or her country. Knowing about their history and culture, they can introduce their country's achievements and highlights to other nations. Nowadays, people get involved in social media, and they have a friend from all over the world. In the start of conversation, we need to introduce our country to each other so if we do not know about our country we would not have a good communication with them. Therefore, people can increase their understanding about their culture if they visit historical places in their country. On the other hand, having travel to other country could not provide this opportunity to us.
Furthermore, people can save their money by having travel in their own country. It is obvious that buying ticket for airplane or other means of transport is very expensive in the most time. Moreover, a plethora of people do not afford to buy tickets for all the member of their family. On the other hand, ones can have a memorable and enjoyable moments with their love ones without expensing much money by having a internal trip. For instance, if one family has its own car, they can have a trip every weekends. In addition, If they do not have a car they can have a walk to near places such as national parks or gardens that are available in every country.
To wrap it up, I am of the opinion that having a trip in our own country or city has significant advantages. Not only do we can enhance our knowledge towards our history and culture, but also we can save our money. It is recommended for family buy having a trip in own country help their country's economy and reputation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, for instance, i think, in addition, kind of, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2019.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 423.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77304964539 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57301211198 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.472813238771 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 634.5 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.8426868698 48.9658058833 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.7727272727 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2272727273 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.77272727273 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325157166341 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112055623703 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107924545733 0.0737576698707 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210705501488 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106566356717 0.0645574589148 165% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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