Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels.
The writer of the argument recommends that the city ban skateboarding in Central Plaza; because of the fact that skateboarders undermine shopping owners’ business and lead to increase the amount of trashes and vandalisms there; however, this recommendation cannot be accepted as it is in that it rests on a number of premises all of which can be challenged in one way or another.
The first problem with the argument is that the writer assumes that many Central Plaza shop owners believe that the decrease in their business is because of the increase in the number of skateboard users in the Plaza. However, there is lack of evidence to prove the writer assumption in that it is possible that these skateboarders are among the people who came to the Central plaza and shopped. Or maybe, there is a new shopping center near Central plaza is just opening and with consideration to this, the reason why shop owners’ business collapsed is that the new one accommodates more equipment for shoppers, even skateboarders. Therefore, the popularity of skateboarding is not the key for decreasing in shop owners’ businesses.
Another problem with the argument is that the writer assumes that there has been a dramatic increase in the amount of trashes and vandalism due to increasing number of skateboarders. However, this is not the case. Maybe the men who are responsible for cleaning the Central Plaza up did not do their responsibility properly, so the amount of trashes increased. Another problem with the assumption is that there is no evidence to prove that the people, who did vandalism there, were skateboarders. Perhaps other groups came to the central Plaza and did this in order to send their message about recent shopping mall failure and trash augmentation.
A third problem with the argument is that the writer assumes that the businesses in Central Plaza will return to its high level as the same as it was 2 years ago if skateboarding is banned. However, there is no evidence to illustrate that 2 years ago they were in fabulous business condition, maybe their condition have few differences in comparison with present, because people thought their products were expensive. Or maybe the country’s economic situation was changed in the past 2 years due to inflation and that is the reason why people hesitate to buy the same products, they bought in past 2 years. Hence, prohibiting the skateboarders in Central Plaza may not change shop keepers’ businesses.
In the final analysis, the writer’s recommendation cannot be taken to be correct because, as it was shown in the body paragraphs above, it depends on a number of assumptions each of which is dubious. The recommendation can only be accepted if the weaknesses already referred to are all removed.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 461 350
No. of Characters: 2256 1500
No. of Different Words: 191 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.634 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.894 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.84 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 127 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.812 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.239 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.357 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.577 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.062 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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The writer of the argument recommends th...
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Line 1, column 92, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
...ity ban skateboarding in Central Plaza; because of the fact that skateboarders undermine shopping owners...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... be challenged in one way or another. The first problem with the argument is t...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sing in shop owners' businesses. Another problem with the argument is tha...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... mall failure and trash augmentation. A third problem with the argument is tha...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...change shop keepers' businesses. In the final analysis, the writer's...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, third
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.6327345309 168% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 13.6137724551 162% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2341.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 461.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07809110629 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03988075743 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.427331887202 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 733.5 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.1785419903 57.8364921388 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.3125 119.503703932 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8125 23.324526521 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 5.70786347227 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309231651876 0.218282227539 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109163728772 0.0743258471296 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0978398878464 0.0701772020484 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165463950286 0.128457276422 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102352740332 0.0628817314937 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 14.3799401198 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.78 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 12.3882235529 222% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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