"Two years ago, the nearby town of Ocean View built a new municipal golf course and resort hotel. During the past two years, tourism in Ocean View has increased, new businesses have opened there, and Ocean View's tax revenues have risen by 30 percent. Therefore, the best way to improve Hopewell's economy—and generate additional tax revenues—is to build a golf course and resort hotel similar to those in Ocean View."
It might seem logical, at first glance to agree with the argument but after reading further the argument seems to have lots of flaws
In order to logically complete the argument lots of additional Information is required.
Firstly the claim made in the argument about the ocean view suggest that it has increased the tourism doesn't convince the reader of the argument since source is not mentioned in the argument and the number of tourist in ocean view may not be due to golf course, instead it may be due to other thing.
Secondly the claim mentioned in the passage about the economy is clearly flawed because it is mentioned in the passage that the ocean view tax has risen its tax by 30 percent but it has not mentioned weather or not the golf course has contributed in that increase and it has also not mentioned about the contribution of the tax revenues of ocean view in the hopwell`s economy it might some other factor has contributed in the economy more like factories and if it is the case then there is no point in opening additional resort hotel similar to that of ocean view.
Therefore it seems quite vague to make a claim that building a resort in certain area will increase the revenue without knowing the constituents of the economy of that area because economy of an area is made up of various factors so in order to determine the economy of that area all those things must be taken into account.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 6 15
No. of Words: 256 350
No. of Characters: 1149 1500
No. of Different Words: 122 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.488 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.373 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 73 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 62 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 32 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 17 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 42.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 29.261 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.464 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.884 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.165 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 103, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ggest that it has increased the tourism doesnt convince the reader of the argument sin...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... hotel similar to that of ocean view. Therefore it seems quite vague to make a claim th...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1173.0 2260.96107784 52% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 255.0 441.139720559 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6 5.12650576532 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45351711864 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 204.123752495 59% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474509803922 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 380.7 705.55239521 54% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 19.7664670659 20% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 63.0 22.8473053892 276% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 129.974035869 57.8364921388 225% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 293.25 119.503703932 245% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 63.75 23.324526521 273% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 19.75 5.70786347227 346% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211621423095 0.218282227539 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112029392629 0.0743258471296 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0961979288069 0.0701772020484 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.091030450715 0.128457276422 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0960919362725 0.0628817314937 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 32.1 14.3799401198 223% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 15.99 48.3550499002 33% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.1628742515 181% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 26.7 12.197005988 219% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 10.29 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 98.500998004 41% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 27.2 11.1389221557 244% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 27.0 11.9071856287 227% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.