The following appeared in a memo from the new vice president of Sartorian, a company that manufactures men's clothing.
"Five years ago, at a time when we had difficulty obtaining reliable supplies of high-quality wool fabric, we discontinued production of our popular alpaca overcoat. Now that we have a new fabric supplier, we should resume production. Given the outcry from our customers when we discontinued this product and the fact that none of our competitors offers a comparable product, we can expect pent-up consumer demand for our alpaca coats. This demand and the overall increase in clothing prices will make Sartorian's alpaca overcoats more profitable than ever before."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The memo from the new vice president of men's clothing manufacturing company Satorian, recommends that the company should resume the production of their previously discontinued alpaca overcoat. The manager based his suggestion on the evidences, that none of the competitors have comparable products, the outcry from the customer when it was discontinued and increase in overall price of the clothing. But before this suggestion can be properly evaluated, the three assumptions made by the manager should be critically analyzed.
Firstly, the manager assumes that the quality of the fabric will be same as before. It might be possible that the new fabric supplier provides low quality materials than previous suppliers. Perhaps, the high quality wool fabric that was previously used is no longer available in the market, it is cheap substitute is being used everywhere. If the above cases are true then the argument of the original memo is encumbered.
Secondly, manager assumes that the customers will come back after five years of discontinuity of the production. Perhaps, within in this five years the fashion choices of the people have changed drastically, people are no longer interested in he alpaca overcoats, as they were before. Similarly, it might also be the case that, during this five years of discontinuity, customers have found other brands and are now inclined towards those brands. So, if the above cases hold water then the argument presented by the author in the memo is significantly hampered.
Thirdly, even if we assume that customers will come back and buy the new overcoats, the manager assumes that the profit will be more that ever before. It might be the case that, high- quality wool fabric provided by the new supplier is to be transported from very far away, which in turn increases the cost of the raw materials needed and thereby reducing the overall profit. It might also be the case that, the wool fabric provided by the new supplier need more filtration and refining than before, which will again increase the cost of production of the coats. So, if the above mentioned situations are true, then the argument presented by the author in the original memo is considerably hindered.
In conclusion, the argument as it stands is considerably flawed because of its reliance on several unstated assumptions. If the manager is able to provides systematic evidences for the above mentioned assumptions, then the recommendation provided by the manager of the Sartoian company regarding the resumption of alapca overcoat can be properly evaluated.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 416 350
No. of Characters: 2109 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.516 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.07 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.735 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 156 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 122 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.471 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.397 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.647 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.358 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.581 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.122 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 341, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ap substitute is being used everywhere. If the above cases are true then the argum...
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Line 9, column 241, Rule ID: HE_THE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'in the alpaca'?
Suggestion: in the alpaca
...ically, people are no longer interested in he alpaca overcoats, as they were before. Similar...
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Line 9, column 447, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[4]
Message: “So , if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... are now inclined towards those brands. So, if the above cases hold water then the arg...
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Line 13, column 701, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...original memo is considerably hindered. In conclusion, the argument as it stands...
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Line 17, column 358, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...pca overcoat can be properly evaluated.
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, regarding, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, third, thirdly, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2178.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 416.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23557692308 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83643965767 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 204.123752495 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.463942307692 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 692.1 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4558609435 57.8364921388 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.117647059 119.503703932 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4705882353 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47058823529 5.70786347227 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161752260922 0.218282227539 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0552607537515 0.0743258471296 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0526853521206 0.0701772020484 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0912792035199 0.128457276422 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0546778188219 0.0628817314937 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.