The qualities and skills that a person requires to become successful in today's world cannot be learned at a university or other academic institutions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The requirements that people need to achieve wealthy in these days cannot be taught in higher education such as colleges or universities. I agree many things that we must learn outside the school in order to success, but I do not think that the knowledge is learned inside academic institutions aren’t necessary in the modern world.
There is reason why should students study more about the knowledge of outside world. After graduated, individuals, which have high degree as a result of hard working in universities, are being rejected because lack of experience in work by the companies. Especially, their skills only focus on deal with problems in a direct way but not in alternative ways. For example, the employee can answer what exactly the time of their partners arrive to the company, while the boss needs more information about their numbers of people, their place for stay or their plan when they arrived. In my opinion, students need to work for part-time jobs, and get more experience in order to know how thing work.
On the other hand, the things that we obtain while study in schools are not in vain because most of them still used in work. Many subjects that appeared in school are related to the fundamental in every job. For instance, accountants need to know what is mathematic because the job is require or biologists must learn about biology in order to understanding natural. If people are not known all about the fundamental of their jobs, they will suffer when advance further in their work.
In conclusion, I believe the road to success required not only the knowledge that learned inside school but also need to study from the outside and improve the skills we obtain through our everyday lives
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 314, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a direct way" with adverb for "direct"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...skills only focus on deal with problems in a direct way but not in alternative ways. For exampl...
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Line 9, column 286, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'required'.
Suggestion: required
...w what is mathematic because the job is require or biologists must learn about biology ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1449.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92857142857 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58462223716 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561224489796 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3973200384 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.75 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.75 7.06120827912 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132097178025 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0482794686742 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513063503447 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0979145750029 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0651042758758 0.056905535591 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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