Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Parents have been engaged to un bring their children in an excellent fashion. One of the most important aspects which should be considered by parents is kids' educational matters and how motivate them to their courses. While many parents hold the opinion that offering money for their kids' high grades of a great importance, others have an opposite point of view. I think offering money for school-age children when they take high grade is good idea. The reasons to support my viewpoint is elaborated upon in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, giving money to children for their high marks is a great incentive for them to learn their courses deeply. To be more specific, parents, nowadays, are seeking to find best ways to encourage their kids to enhance their knowledge and understanding since having a good background will determine their kids' success in the future in different aspects such as finding a decent job. In this cases, money can be a good motivation for children to study harder their lessons to accomplish a specific amount of money for their success from their parents. An example can shed some light on this issue. When I was in primary school, my performance in mathematics was not excellent. One day when I took an A grade in this course, he gave me 10 dollars and said to me if I can take an A grade in each of my lessons, He will give me rewards. Therefore, after this conversation, I studied harder for all of my courses since I desired to take a money from my father.
Moreover, children can learn how to manage and use their money. To put it in other words, children are very dependent on their parents in various aspects. It is no secret to any one that young persons need to be independent in the future. Furthermore, if parents give money to their kids and teach them how use this money for buying their needs such as a school stuff. children will be more aware and they will be more convenient in the future. Additionally, they can learn save their money in order to use in emergency situations rather than unnecessary issues.
In conclusion, considering all the reasons and points, I strongly believe that it is more favorable to offer money to children when they take a high grade in their class. This is because not only can they learn their courses more deeply, but also they can be aware how to manage their money.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 54, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an excellent fashion" with adverb for "excellent"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...been engaged to un bring their children in an excellent fashion. One of the most important aspects whic...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ted upon in the following paragraphs. To begin with, giving money to children ...
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Line 3, column 181, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'find the best'.
Suggestion: find the best
...ific, parents, nowadays, are seeking to find best ways to encourage their kids to enhance...
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Line 3, column 398, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...spects such as finding a decent job. In this cases, money can be a good motivation f...
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Line 3, column 708, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'an' or 'A' is left.
Suggestion: an; A
... was not excellent. One day when I took an A grade in this course, he gave me 10 dol...
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Line 3, column 786, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'an' or 'A' is left.
Suggestion: an; A
...10 dollars and said to me if I can take an A grade in each of my lessons, He will gi...
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Line 3, column 944, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'money'.
Suggestion: money
...l of my courses since I desired to take a money from my father. Moreover, child...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ired to take a money from my father. Moreover, children can learn how to mana...
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Line 5, column 180, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'anyone'?
Suggestion: anyone
... in various aspects. It is no secret to any one that young persons need to be independe...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Children
...ing their needs such as a school stuff. children will be more aware and they will be mor...
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Line 5, column 480, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to save'
Suggestion: to save
...he future. Additionally, they can learn save their money in order to use in emergenc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, i think, in conclusion, such as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1947.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65789473684 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55725065595 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471291866029 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 602.1 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0013010031 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.35 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.384364565971 0.236089414692 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129225870158 0.076458572812 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102403514485 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.254896821101 0.150856017488 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0498195354304 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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