Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For the successful development of a country, it is more important to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities.
There is an ever-lasting debate among politicians and consultants on which part of the educational process of the youth requires more attention. Over the past decades, the value of academical training has soared up due to technological advancements, which are the outcomes of scientists and engineers who were ambitious toward more progress. Some people hold the view that more budget should be spent on young children's educations, say five to ten years olds, for they form the next generation. However, I believe spending more money on universities can be more productive.
To begin with, children of the age between five to ten do not have visionary ideas about their future. To be more specific, five-year-olds care about their hobbies and snacks more than the future of their country. This merely has two main reasons. First, they do not know what is ahead of them. They have a slightly closed perspective about their desires and ambitions, as well as available opportunities. Of course, no one expects a child to be worried about the future from that age. Second, they do not know and, more importantly, cannot be taught principles of budgeting while being that young. These children do not grasp the concept of investing since the money to them was always available. In other words, they do not understand the value of money if it is about to flow. With this in mind, it makes no difference to these subjects if more financial support is available for elementary schools. It instead serves the teachers and their parents.
Besides, universities provide serious research opportunities. They have laboratories as well as great minds to spent alongside the money. When people reach the age of university and college, it is safe to say they got a future planned out. They know their interests as well as their abilities. They are more capable of communicating and innovating compared to young children, and they play a vital role in prospering the community. Also, providing more money for universities means more options for various programs and scholarships. This can bring more variety to the academical environments. As another advantage, with more funding options, more international students can pursue their degree in abroad universities. This leads to a global interaction of science and technology. Therefore, we can be sure the money spent on universities is never near to dissipation.
All in all, I believe money is a more critical factor in higher educations rather than elementary schools. Children's lack of a fully-developed mind and university ability regarding contribution to a thriving society are the main reasons for this preference. Governments should be more careful with the budget and its effects on different aspects of people's lives.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, regarding, second, so, therefore, well, while, of course, as well as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2330.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20089285714 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99047168827 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546875 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 730.8 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.8650323782 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.2142857143 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.96428571429 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26938813605 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0673712529616 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0596203796211 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169723491824 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0226481670722 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.58 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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