Claim: In any field-business, politics, education, government- those in power should step down after five years. Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership.
Many would say that those who have power in any field should step down after five years. In some fields in which the integrity of a powered man is important, the argument would be true. However, I firmly believe that aside from the area of politics and government, new leadership could not be to the surest path to success for any enterprise.
Admittedly, the five years regulation would be necessary for politics and government. Those who work for government offices are susceptible to economical seduces because of the lobbyists. The more one serves for the government, the more they are exposed to corruption. In this regard, it would be beneficial to prevent this corruption by compelling anyone to resign its position in every five years.
However, it does not necessarily indicate that any corporation can revive with a new leader. In the case of business, we can easily observe those who run an enterprise during one’s entire life. After a company sets vision and mission in the right direction, the renovation through new leadership might not require, rather persistence endeavors with one leader can be more advantageous. For example, Warren Buffet who started and has continued his own investment company illustrates the merits of extended leadership. He is renowned by setting a principle of the investment, which is only investing with a long-term value of the stocks far from being myopic and making short-sighted decisions, and his story indicates that a corporation can be successful without change of leadership.
In conclusion, despite the benefits of the five years restriction in politics, I disagree with the given both the reason and the claim because revitalization through new leadership does not always ensure success for any enterprise in any field.
- All college students should take a public speaking course that teaches how to speak well in front of many people before graduation. 83
- People learn more by watching television than by reading books 83
- Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition. 76
- The following appeared in a memorandum from the owner of Movies Galore a chain of movie rental stores In order to stop the recent decline in our profits we must reduce operating expenses at Movies Galore s ten movie rental stores Since we are famous for o 79
- All college students should take a public speaking course that teaches how to speak well in front of many people before graduation 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 246, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...uccess for any enterprise in any field.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1498.0 2235.4752809 67% => OK
No of words: 288.0 442.535393258 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20138888889 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.55969084622 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93367848019 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 215.323595506 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579861111111 0.4932671777 118% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 704.065955056 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.3702653048 60.3974514979 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.230769231 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1538461538 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.30769230769 5.21951772744 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.396888419981 0.243740707755 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12590985443 0.0831039109588 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119924302789 0.0758088955206 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.253266836165 0.150359130593 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.134590720408 0.0667264976115 202% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 100.480337079 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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