Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
These days a complicated world causes many changes in people's lives also their behaviour towards their extended families is different from the previous time. some believe that there is a reduction in the importance of grand parents and other extended family like uncles, aunts, est among people, I strongly agree with that.
To begin with, in the past, most families lived together in a big house, so they saw each other everyday even females cooked food with each other, so in such a big family who live together, young numbers had to respect the older ones and help them whenever they need, also youngsters in the family got advice from them in their problems. for example, when my father was child, he went to school from morning until noon, then he went to his uncle's store to help him in his work. but these days people prefer to live separately, and after marriage every child go to his/her own house, also great distance make them far from each other. these pieces of evidence indicates the importance of extended family in comparison with nowadays.
Secondly, although a todays' modern life has many advantages, it has problems such as lake of time that most people deal with, therefore, they can not spend much time with their extended family and on weekends that they have leisure time, they prefer to have fun with their parents and sibiligns rather than their uncles and aunts. as a consequence, I am so busy all the week and the only time that I can see my parents is on Fridays and I do not have free time to visit even my grandparents.
In conclusion, a change in todays' conditions of life in contrast with the past that people could be more free and the easygoing character of members of the family who could tolerate to live together make the importance of extended family higher than now, but I think people have to respect them as possible as they can.
- tpo22 task1 70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- tpo-41 76
- agree or disagree that government have to spend money to improve internet access than improve public transportation 60
- Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to s 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 32, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'cause'?
Suggestion: cause
These days a complicated world causes many changes in peoples lives also thei...
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Line 1, column 159, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Some
...es is different from the previous time. some believe that there is a reduction in th...
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Line 3, column 339, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
...got advice from them in their problems. for example, when my father was child, he w...
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Line 3, column 479, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...s uncles store to help him in his work. but these days people prefer to live separa...
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Line 3, column 635, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: These
...distance make them far from each other. these pieces of evidence indicates the import...
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Line 3, column 660, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[3]
Message: You should probably use 'indicate'.
Suggestion: indicate
...om each other. these pieces of evidence indicates the importance of extended family in co...
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Line 7, column 20, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a today' or simply 'todays'?
Suggestion: a today; todays
... with nowadays. Secondly, although a todays modern life has many advantages, it has...
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Line 7, column 332, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: As
...gns rather than their uncles and aunts. as a consequence, I am so busy all the wee...
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Line 11, column 174, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'tolerate living'.
Suggestion: tolerate living
...cter of members of the family who could tolerate to live together make the importance of extende...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for example, i think, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1554.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 332.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68072289157 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33599824318 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542168674699 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 486.0 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.6003584229 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 20.1344086022 179% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.4886824039 48.9658058833 181% => OK
Chars per sentence: 172.666666667 100.406767564 172% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.8888888889 20.6045352989 179% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.0 5.45110844103 257% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180786815669 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0832104474703 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0531751627022 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119288991373 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0174757187095 0.0645574589148 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.1 11.7677419355 162% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.4 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.46 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 10.002688172 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 10.0537634409 163% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.247311828 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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