Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There are many people who believe that as people’s lives are getting longer as more time they must devote to the work raising the retirement age. As for me, I can not agree with this matter fully and I’m sure that in some cases such an attitude may have negative consequences. In the following part of this essay, I will give an example and express my opinion on this issue.
To begin with, as technology and medicine develop as more nations live longer and longer. No one can deny that it’s logical to lift the border of retirement since people are still able to work and contribute to the developing of a country’s economy. It might be argued that the government is not capable to face the expenditures and the maintenance of pension payments is a burden for it.
However, some factors of human attitude are impossible to neglect and must be taken into account. For instance, nearly in Russia, the government decided to elevate dramatically the age at which people retire by 5 years. In terms of people who were about to retire, they were extremely disappointed because of it and many of them refused to work which led to unemployment and poverty. Moreover, some of the elderly argued that government by doing this is stealing money from people since they will receive less pension than they used to do. In my opinion, retirement age increases shall occur gradually as long as the average length of lives goes up. The government should take into consideration all circumstances of each individual case and action according to it.
In conclusion, widening the age of retirement may effect negatively both elderly and society. However, it is inevitable that this tough decision will happen one day. If the right approach is chosen by the government, the negative consequences will be evaded.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, as for, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, in some cases, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1510.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9025974026 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77866505853 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574675324675 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.4410144753 49.4020404114 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 100.666666667 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5333333333 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.26666666667 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299218149319 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0861508971566 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0779102482375 0.0667982634062 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15886094885 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0783275966296 0.056905535591 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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