Tpo25- integrated writing
The reading and the lecture discuss the likelihood of the set of clay jars excavated from Iraq as used as an electric battery in ancient times. The passage states three main explanations for why the vessel was not used as an electric battery. The lecturer, however opposes the viewpoints expressed by the author of the passage.
Firstly, the passage states that the absence of any conductor material like metal wire has negated the idea that the vessel could be used as a battery. The lecturer refutes this idea by stating that local people might have found wire but since it was uninteresting to them they would have not noticed. Likewise, they might have even thrown them away.
Secondly, the author mentions that copper cylinder which was excavated was similar to those found amongst the remains in city of Seleucia. There cylinder was being used a holder for scrolls. The lecturer rebuts this statement by clarifying that any ancient inventor might have found out that when iron rods and liquid in a vessel was used electric current was produced.
Finally, the writer of the passage averts that no devices existed in ancient times to work on electricity indicating its uselessness. The lecturer argues that if anyone touched the vessel might have an invisible power. Moreover, the electricity from the battery would probably have been used for its healing action by the ancient doctors for certain muscle pain.
To conclude the lecturer cast doubt on the ideas made by the author of the passage.
- TPO41 80
- Tpo30 3
- Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon. On the other hand, conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would be impossible. 60
- All university students should be required to take history courses no matter what their field of study is. 66
- tpo 1 integrated writing 80
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 191, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ssage states three main explanations for why the vessel was not used as an electr...
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Line 1, column 245, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...el was not used as an electric battery. The lecturer, however opposes the viewpoint...
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Line 13, column 233, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t have an invisible power. Moreover, the electricity from the battery would proba...
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Line 13, column 293, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he battery would probably have been used for its healing action by the ancient do...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, likewise, moreover, second, secondly
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1277.0 1373.03311258 93% => OK
No of words: 252.0 270.72406181 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06746031746 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40781146676 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 145.348785872 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539682539683 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 399.6 419.366225166 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9410808671 49.2860985944 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2307692308 110.228320801 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3846153846 21.698381199 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.07692307692 7.06452816374 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367863639847 0.272083759551 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127576602409 0.0996497079465 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0661121501393 0.0662205650399 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18394270964 0.162205337803 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.093098376236 0.0443174109184 210% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 53.8541721854 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.2367328918 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 63.6247240618 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.