It is suggested that every want to have a car, a television and a fridge. Do the disadvantages of this development for society outweigh the advantages
It is true that a car, a television and a fridge are the must-have items that many people manage to have these days. While this trend might be negative to some extent, I would argue that its positive side is greater.
On the one hand, the mass ownership of these consumer products could lead to several health and environmental issues. Cars discourage people from taking exercise such as walking or cycling short distances, and they also produce a huge amount of greenhouse gases namely CO2 and SO2 which are the main cause of air pollution and the phenomenon of global warming. Excessively spending time watching television results in a sedentary lifestyle as well, which would have an adverse impact on human physical health. Even the fridge prompts unhealthy eating as people are tempted to eat processed food storing in their fridges without preparing authentic food for themselves.
On the other hand, I believe that the benefits of owning these necessary goods outweigh the drawbacks. First, cars facilitate the way people travel, so they can find it easy to go to visit relatives or meet their business partners in other cities where they cannot travel to by walking or cycling. Second, there are many useful TV programmes which significantly enrich people’s knowledge. For example, Discovery Channel provides people with an enormous perception of the natural environment in which many wild creatures live. Final, the convenience of storing food in the fridge for long periods is obvious as food waste is reduced and visits to supermarkets can be made on a weekly basis.
In conclusion, while using a car, a television and a fridge might have several disadvantages, I believe that the necessary items bring more advantages, increasing the living standards of citizens.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 78, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[8]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun health seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'some health'.
Suggestion: some health
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, so, then, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1499.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15120274914 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76233945105 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621993127148 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8060751748 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.916666667 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.25 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124201075755 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0448217815901 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424673191514 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0870548742948 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0339424767469 0.056905535591 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.71 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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