Some people think that arts (for example, music or painting) don't directly improve people's wellbeing, and therefore the government should spend money on other things. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
While arts, indeed, influence people’s mental abilities, it is not wise for the government to spend money on development of arts in a country. Firstly, it is essential to put the state welfare as a priority. Second, if there is a healthy, employed population with stable and sufficient income, there will be a huge boost in development in the field of arts.
To begin with, in must not be neglected, that the government has an obligation before its citizens to provide them with an opportunity to get proper medical help, decent education and career growth prospects. Creation of such facilities demands large amounts of money, and it must be put on the biggest article in the state budget. To illustrate, it is relevant to take the annual budget of Russia, where it is decided to spend 1/3 of the all budget on upgrading welfare system and making the quality of life to go up.
Furthermore, arts are useless in case of society poverty. When people are making ends meet, they are not interested neither in paintings nor in music. It would be meaningless for a state to build museums, organize exhibitions, invest money in buying paintings of worldwide legends in art, if its citizens are tortured by hunger and lack of finances. On the opposite, having invested in welfare system once, a state gets enthusiastic population, driven by the desire to learn more about art craft in the long run.
For example, it is evident, that a level of a good income of the USA citizens allows the government to focus on its cultural policy through developing contemporary and modern arts, the result of this policy may be seen in a huge amount of famous modern artists and musicians who come from the US.
To conclude, I am firmly convinced that poor states must abandon the idea of investing money in arts, due to the fact that people’s lives do not depend on paintings and songs, they depend on food, shelter, and the ability to be rescued in the case of emergency. Focusing on arts, the government may take decent lives of citizens away.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, so, thus, while, for example, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 41.998997996 157% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1693.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 354.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78248587571 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71847123636 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550847457627 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.2180295147 49.4020404114 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.230769231 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2307692308 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.84615384615 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144679908834 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0518743451973 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520912605071 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0795770385415 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0353115284107 0.056905535591 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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