TPO6 (independent)
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children.
In today’s progressive world, human beings from all corners of the globe are striving to enhance the quality of their lives. nowadays, most of the individuals are facing the dilemma of whether life in the present era is more convenient or life of their ancestors who lived decades ago. I, personally speaking, believe that living in the present time is not only enjoyable and pleasurable, but it is also easy and convenient. In what follows, the reasons to support my viewpoint are vindicated.
The first and foremost reason which is worth mentioning is that a revolutionary phenomenon which is the genesis of technology has drastically changed human beings’ life compared to the life of our predecessors. The advancement of the state-of-the-art technologies, the internet, means of transportation, and kitchen utensils to name but a handful caused individual to take advantage of every moment of their lives. A study conducted at Arizona State University reveals that because of all the new inventions and advancements, life expectancy has been increased and doubled. To put it into a more vivid picture, a simple comparison between the lives of today’s generation and the life of our grandparents can make the difference crystal clear. For one thing, people can benefit from high-tech transportation like subway, train, plain and even high-speed cars which were nothing but an imagination to our ancestors years ago. Having used the internet, people can shop as easily as possible; however, in the past people had to make an effort to go out in order to buy their essentials. Thanks to the technology and new inventions, it is undeniable that human beings are experiencing great moments in their lives with less pain, due to the invention of new medication; high rate of pleasure and convenience due to the presence of easy-to-use apparatus and utensils and last but not least the vast knowledge they are being provided with will lead to further innovation and inventions.
The second equally significant reason is the notion that nowadays people are presented with ample opportunity in order to reveal their talent and skills as a result of which they will be enabled to flourish. In today’s competitive world, no longer does a person continue his or her ancestors’ vocation unless they are really interested in those jobs. To illustrate, in the past a vocation was considered as a heritage which had to be preserved by each member of the family; hence, jobs such as animal husbandry and farming were among the most prevalent jobs that would be granted to descendants whether or not these vocations were their ideal choice. On the contrary, rarely can we observe such circumstance in twenty first century, since the burgeoning market allows people to find the best alteration that will satisfy their demands. Although people care about their forefathers’ vocation and the so-called heritage, their wants and whishes are being prioritized. Furthermore, it is no secret to anyone that finding the best position and opportunity is not as difficult as it used to be which is due to the entrepreneurial occasions people are provided with.
In conclusion, taking all the aforementioned reasons into account, I strongly hold the view that nowadays life is more convenient than the time of our grandfathers. reasons such as the advancement of technology and the opportunities one finds to bloom are among the most conspicuous rationales. is there anyone who can ignore all these amenities and facilities which has made life so wonderful?
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 131, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Nowadays
... to enhance the quality of their lives. nowadays, most of the individuals are facing the...
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Line 9, column 606, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...bs that would be granted to descendants whether or not these vocations were their ideal choice...
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Line 9, column 722, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: twenty-first
...ely can we observe such circumstance in twenty first century, since the burgeoning market al...
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Line 9, column 735, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'century' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'centuries'.
Suggestion: centuries
...serve such circumstance in twenty first century, since the burgeoning market allows peo...
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Line 13, column 166, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Reasons
...ient than the time of our grandfathers. reasons such as the advancement of technology a...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Is
... among the most conspicuous rationales. is there anyone who can ignore all these a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, really, second, so, in conclusion, such as, as a result, for one thing, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 15.1003584229 225% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3002.0 1977.66487455 152% => OK
No of words: 576.0 407.700716846 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21180555556 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89897948557 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09491692982 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 301.0 212.727598566 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522569444444 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 945.0 618.680645161 153% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.5477935458 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.1 100.406767564 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.9 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0952810717521 0.236089414692 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0295177741368 0.076458572812 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0309681131946 0.0737576698707 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0626977125112 0.150856017488 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0108744650269 0.0645574589148 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 11.7677419355 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.53 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 150.0 86.8835125448 173% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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