today's young people do not give enough time to helping their communities
Nowadays, life is so much harder than in the past, generally, and time would pass so much faster than before in urban life. Consequently, people have to do so many tasks during the day, and they may do not have enough time to help their community, nor do they want to help at all. So, I firmly agree with this idea that today's young people do not give enough time to helping their communities. I have this idea because of two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, all the communities' atmosphere compels young people to continue their education to higher degrees in order that has a better future job and guaranteed life. As a result, they have to spend so many times to continue their education. And no extra time remains for them to want to help their communities, even nor do they have time to follow their interests. My own experience demonstrates this concept very well. When I was 18, and I just got admitted to the university, my father bought me a professional camera. And I really loved to do some charity work with it. Although I took some free photos for a charity institute, after a while, I could not continue it anymore because of my university projects that would be so heavy. And hardly had I have free time.
Second, some young people do not like to help their communities, whether they have time or not. I believe that in today’s world, children change so much than the past, and they are so much selfish that they do not care about anyone else. It may have several reasons. For instance, It may have its roots in their families or their schools or their communities. I have an excellent example of this situation. I live in Iran, someday I have worked in a kindergarten. The children who were there mostly were from wealthy families, and the way that their parents raised their children was unbelievable for me. Actually, never have I seen such horrible methods to raise a kid. Those kids were so spoiled, and hardly do they care about other people. Although I believe that we should respect children so much, on the other hand, we should teach them respect for others and be kind to other people. I am sure when these kids grow up, they will be so selfish. If someday I have a kid, I will teach him/her to help other people and care about his/her community.
To sum up, I definitely agree with this idea that today’s young people do not help their community like before. Because some of them really do not have enough time, in addition, they are so engaging in their own lives. On the other hand, there are some young people that they do not have any interest in helping their communities since they do not learn to.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 23, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'communities'' or 'community's'?
Suggestion: communities'; community's
...ollowing essay. First of all, all the communities atmosphere compels young people to cont...
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Line 5, column 190, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... so much than the past, and they are so much selfish that they do not care about any...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, consequently, first, if, may, really, second, so, well, while, for instance, in addition, as a result, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 81.0 43.0788530466 188% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2200.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 486.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52674897119 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44339116297 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460905349794 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 698.4 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 1.86738351254 536% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.621542799 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.4814814815 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.74074074074 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367186225068 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112089885926 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137508202522 0.0737576698707 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.296229125524 0.150856017488 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113730480098 0.0645574589148 176% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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