young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.
In this progressive and sophisticated world where we live, caring about society and stuff is a crucial priority for humankind. People more than the past are occupy with problem in community. In this line of thought, some people believe that youths are not adequately paying attention to communities, while many others posit this notion, stating that young people devote sufficient time to assist their society. I, personally, concur with the latter group for two main reasons, I will elaborate in the following paragraphs.
First of all, in this modern era, youth have a vital role in the promotion of the society, and they are dedicate enough time to help their community by doing voluntarily endeavor whenever their country encounter with disaster or spend difficult days. To clarify, when community face with destruction and war and natural disaster, young people assist society to help and renovate society. Without assisting of young people who have responsibilities over their societies, communities is not shaped. For instance, if the earthquake or huge flood happens in one country, the people, particularly young ones will go for help their community. They are the pioneer to rebuilt and survive people. Consequently, juvenile has a undeniable contribution on community.
Secondly, nowadays societies need a plethora of revival and young blood to advance their country, so young people have occupied with progressing in technology. To be more specific, there is no shortage of debate if the society want to develop in fast-paced competition beyond continent, it should use vigorous youth in society. Therefore, these days young people are studying tough and try to invent something new and be a innovative person in their society. For example, ten years ago my country was a developing country, thus now it is a developed country. This progress is not occurred, if the youth never help my country by spend most of their time on investigating and learn new things to achieve the goals
To sum up, I assume young people dedicate enough time to their society for two main reasons. First of all, because they voluntarily help their society in hard time, secondly because they study hard and invent to advance their country. As for this writer's advice, I urge government do not impose restrain to youths.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, as for, for example, for instance, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1952.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20533333333 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78071325782 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.498336415 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.823529412 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0588235294 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.88235294118 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.359357204298 0.236089414692 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101216512316 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0914692404164 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224467344574 0.150856017488 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0527551881974 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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