Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.
In this progressive and sophisticate world where we live, society gain a plethora of advantages from advertising. Therefore, the majority of seller are using advertising to sell more product. In this line of thought, some people believe that handful of advertisement illustrate their product much better than they really are, some others posit the notion that the product in advertising is as same as a real one. I, personally, concur with the former group for two main reasons. I will elaborate in the following paragraphs.
First of all, in this modern era, people use the rule of white lie in their works to illustrate their yield much better and can sell more. To be more specific, by pretending that each material have more advantages, companies can develop and achieve their goals to gain more benefit. Moreover, the real means of advertising is that assist their producer to advance and gain more money. For example, one factory wants to enhance their work, so they make an advertisement, they demonstrate their product effective and suitable for audience to sell more on society.
Secondly, most of the people understand when the advertisement simultaneously broadcast in TV program or in billboard or radio, there is not as same as reality. To clarify, when individuals want to produce advertisement, they use particular effect and bright light and professional filmmaker to make their program astonishing and attract people. I can allude to a personal experience, last year I saw an advertisement about specific in forceps which made easier to utilize it and extracted teeth with any high effort. I captivated to forceps and purchased it. Consequently, I used it, but I found that it was not discrete from other forceps and merely spent more money for nothing.
To sum up, I assume that advertisement is looking more better than reality for two essential reasons. First of all because companies want to sell more crops and secondly because videos and pictures are more attractive than actual things. As for this writer's advice, I urge people to careful about advertisement.
- asteroids 71
- whales 66
- One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job. Do you agree with this statement? 63
- if people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying. 70
- ice age 80
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 51, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
... I assume that advertisement is looking more better than reality for two essential reasons....
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Line 13, column 251, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...ractive than actual things. As for this writers advice, I urge people to careful about...
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Line 13, column 280, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s for this writers advice, I urge people to careful about advertisement.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, look, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, as for, for example, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1760.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 342.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14619883041 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91825317036 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.573099415205 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7654707214 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.529411765 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1176470588 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.70588235294 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235679034374 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0659414123559 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0924579927408 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143960706369 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0820003468872 0.0645574589148 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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