Some people think that government should give money to creative people such as artists and musicians. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is often argued that creative people like artists and musicians should receive financial support from the government. I completely agree with this statement and think that money should be offered for these talented people.
First of all, people like musicians and artists of a country are often paid less than they deserve. In other words, people like them use their creativity and skills in the form of arts, paintings and music. However, the money that they receive through the sale of the art or by entertaining thousands of people is really low in figure. To illustrate this, an artist so called ‘Adam Thigh’ was recently interviewed on television where he expressed his poor financial situation despite selling artefacts and paintings. Hence, the government should take the responsibility of supporting these poor individuals.
Secondly, artists and musicians play an vital role in preserving a country’s culture and traditions. Even though, musicians are considered as a form of entertainment for many, they also maintain the value of traditional musics through the use of historical musical instruments. Similarly, the artefacts and paintings made by various artist are often bought by tourists and this has became a way of promoting our culture to an international level. For instance, the Madison painting of the 1960s is a valuable piece of art from a German artist which is still hanged on the UK museum. So, I believe these creativity should be appreciated in the form of money.
In conclusion, I strongly agree that the government should offer money to artists and musicians because of their poor economic situation and the role they play in promoting our traditions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, really, second, secondly, similarly, so, still, for instance, in conclusion, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1438.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28676470588 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9461722278 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555147058824 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 439.2 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4404458073 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.615384615 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9230769231 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3076923077 7.06120827912 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221013798782 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0851241416568 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0555261705905 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157874094643 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0584557165633 0.056905535591 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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