Some people think that more money should be spent on protecting endangered species while others think it is waste of valuable money.What is your opinion?

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Some people think that more money should be spent on protecting endangered species while others think it is waste of valuable money.

What is your opinion?

it is human's responsibility to protect flora and fauna. Some people believe that crowd should spend extensively for protect those animals which are in danger ,while others think that it is wasteful thing. This essay will discuss as to why more money should be spent on it.

On the one hand , those who believed that it is squander of money for numerious reasons. First of all, government should spend huge amount of money on industrial sectors who will give job opportunity to youngsters,rather than on endangered animals. because it is necessary for government bodies to focus on industrial development rather than spending money on those species which are in threat by which , plenty of capital could be consumed . For instance , China recently spent one third of its GDP on protecting them due to that ,at present there is the time of recession.

On the other hand,it is crucial to nation for several reasons. Firstly,as they are salient factor in country's development, government has to spend money to protect them. because it is best way to bring back touristers from worldwide to watch them at cages where they are kept. If more visitors come, they will enhance the income sources for government. Furthermore,due to that youngsters will get essential information on how much these animals are important for nation as these are pride of nation.

To conclude, despite the waste of money of protecting animals which are at edge of extinction . I believed that it is prominent for nation to progress economically, industrially and globally.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, so, third, while, as to, for instance, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1311.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16141732283 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87529971125 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.582677165354 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 397.8 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4841740448 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.6428571429 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1428571429 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35714285714 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.01903807615 339% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258542354035 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0864477905038 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0821699259724 0.0667982634062 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17597697602 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125161243702 0.056905535591 220% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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