In achieving personal happiness, our relationships with other people (family, friends, colleagues) are more important than anything else. Issues such as work and wealth take second place. Argue in support of this claim.
It is evident that the increasing pressures of today’s money-driven world can cause people to gravitate towards material items. A successful career and personal happiness are not in pari passu. It is argued that in accomplishing personal happiness, a lot of things aside from work and wealth come to play, things such as relationships with your immediate family, friends, and colleagues. This essay will discuss the lives of wealthy celebrities and the advice of older people who speak from experience.
Firstly, wealth can never buy true happiness. Even the holy bible said that “money is the root of all evil”. Take, for instance, the famous Michael Jackson died unhappy and alone. He died due to depression. The popular rock star, although being wealthy, died with so much sadness in his heart. If had someone to share his fears, problems, and worries, he probably would have still been alive today. Dr. John Doe, a renowned mechanical engineer committed suicide before his 56th birthday in Angola. Until his untimely death, Dr. Doe was among the richest people in Angola and West Africa as a whole. He died because he was not happy. Wealth, which often comes from labor does not bring with it true happiness.
Secondly, Bill Gate wrote in his best selling books titled “Where does true happiness comes from?” that after spending 82 years on the planet earth and with the amount of wealth he accrued, he stated clearly that he’s so grateful for his family and his best friend, Abel Schultz. Abel helped Bill in building his multi-million dollar company in San Francisco, which is now the best Information Technology driven company in the world. Again, Bill wouldn’t have been able to accomplish all that he has without his family and friends.
In summary, true happiness does not come from being wealthy. Family, friends, and colleagues are the real catalysts to long-lasting happiness. This can be seen from the real-life examples shown above.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 92, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'come'?
Suggestion: come
... titled 'Where does true happiness comes from?' that after spending 82 year...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, still, for instance, in summary, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1677.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17592592593 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66550900798 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.623456790123 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 59.4928567141 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.85 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.1 7.06120827912 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13850904084 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.044590129155 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0625451140262 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0984556220793 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0677260699331 0.056905535591 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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