Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of the society. Others, however, believe that the school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give own opinion.
Educating children to be a part of good society is extremely crucial. While it can be argued that parents should take such responsibility, others believe that school should take the upper hand. Owed to the social activities in the school, I take the opinion that schooling is the best place to prepare children to be a good member in the society.
Perhaps the main reason why people think that children should learn the way to be good members by their parents is because their family give them the necessary upbringing before schooling. At such period, children receive the parent’s instructions and obey them meticulously. This because children are immature enough to detect which action is wrong or right. Thereafter, teaching them such distinguish will be stored in their memory, which in turn will guide them to do the rightness. If the parents ensure the optimal upbringing, their children will be able to deal with different issues, to avoid doing mistakes, and to benefit their people.
Despite the considerable impact of parents on children behavior, there is also a case for the idea that school is the appropriate place for graduating good students. This is because students spend more time in school than at home, which allowed them to share in social activities. This work educates them the meanings of charity, kindness, and loveless; as a sequel, children will grow in a healthy environment.
In conclusion, both school teachers and family members play a pivotal role in the upbringing of children to be good members in their society. As a place that provides social activities, I hold the notion that school has the potential to be more effective and perhaps even more accurately detect the opportunities to prepare good children for the society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1493.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11301369863 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75824222448 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517123287671 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 449.1 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4620632744 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.846153846 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4615384615 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.61538461538 7.06120827912 37% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.358858681434 0.244688304435 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130862269928 0.084324248473 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0850122480922 0.0667982634062 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221353651294 0.151304729494 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0687282027458 0.056905535591 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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