Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achivements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree with this statement?
It is true that many celebrities are known by their wealth and glamour lifestyles rather than their hard work which could be a bad instance for young generation on many sides. I feel that youngsters tend to be more naive to adults and misunderstand the concept of achieving something by hard work.
Unfortunately these days those kinds of celebrities have become numerous who have famed for their fortune yet in extreme cases for inherited money from their well of parents. Moreover, it has become obvious that youth who are children of high class parents are likely to become spotted which then encourage them to be more famous. For instance they take up singing or acting do that they could be well recognized in public.
Furthermore these people who reached fame by their luxurius ways of live do not necessarily care about the impacts of their actions on young people. In many cases they are bound todo something which has led them to get awards for their some kind of performances yet they consider this as a hobby.
On the other hand, there are myriad parents intrigued the wealth of famous people which in turn making a wrong concept on their child. Besides that, youngsters tend to chat to their peers about the cars, enourmous estate buildings and jewellary items of their celebs make an incorrects conclusions that "if a person is better off he will be liked even though hi is not either talented or doing something good for community.
Overall, my feeling is that more valued things should be the achievmnets of celebrities which were reached by making an effort.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 219, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...eover, it has become obvious that youth who are children of high class parents are like...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
... could be well recognized in public. Furthermore these people who reached fame by their ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, furthermore, if, moreover, so, then, well, for instance, i feel, kind of, in many cases, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1323.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88191881919 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5037056726 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.59778597786 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 401.4 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.2273364523 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.3 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.7 7.06120827912 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293591601187 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111303281954 0.084324248473 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0680734829024 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15405529987 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0591870214858 0.056905535591 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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