Some people believe that traveling to and living in numerous places increases one’s ability
to relate and connect to other people. Others believe that this ability is better cultivated by
living in one place and developing a deep understanding of that community.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own
position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and
supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
It is human nature for people to relate to each other. I mostly agree that living in numerous places increases one's ability to connect. It is certainly possible to cultivate an ability to relate and connect with either choice, but the stronger likelihood for success comes with travel. There are a few reasons why the former is more advantageous.
First, living in multiple places gives a larger scope of humanity as a whole. A person might be used to one location and find themselves shocked by the way another place functions. It leads to questions and therefore a deeper knowledge of why these people chose to live in this way. It teaches a person to respect cultures different from their own and even immerses themselves in it. This will weaken the fear of the unknown and lead to a wide variety of friends.
Furthermore, moving so often you learn to adapt quickly to new surroundings and cultures. For a person who stays in one place, adaptation is not a skill they must acquire. Many travelers find that people they once assumed to be vastly different from themselves are actually quite similar when they take a closer look. The bonds of family and struggle of the workforce are universal. While the unique qualities of a place cannot be entirely mimicked, it is usually possible to find some common ground. This is essential for individuals who want to cultivate a connection with others
Lastly, while the other side can argue that living in one place leads to deeper ties, the goal presented in the prompt is relating and connecting. Staying in one place will not exercise your ability to adapt, consequentially leaving you to assume that you have a clear idea of how others act. There is an argument to be made for the media, which does often portray many different lifestyles, but living and seeing are two very different things. One cannot learn to connect simply by watching others do so in movies or television shows. Not to mention, places like Amish country are uniquely isolated from the outside world, rejecting their customs. A person in that community would have no idea what the outside cultures entail. Even these strict practices let youth spend time outside to learn and decide for themselves.
In conclusion, while either side can make a valid argument for ability to cultivate connection, the chances are far greater with exploration. The potential for learning and testing yourself will lead to an open mind, and in turn, an open heart.
- Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall stu 50
- The following appeared in a memorandum from the manager of WWAC radio station."WWAC must change from its current rock-music format because the number of listeners has been declining, even though the population in our listening area has been growing. 77
- The following editorial appeared in the Lamont Times newspaper."During last year’s election, only 35 percent of people living in Lamont voted, whereas inthe nearby affluent town of Chiswick, that number was 75 percent. In a recent survey ofyoung ad 16
- The following memorandum is from the president of Primo Doll Manufacturing Inc According to a survey last year of parents who purchased the Elkie our most popular doll 90 percent reported that although their children were extremely satisfied with the doll 61
- CLAIM Young people s tendency to make extensive use of portable devices like smartphones and tablets has hurt their development of social skills REASON These devices encourage users to form artificial personalities and relationships online rather than ful 63
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 112, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...hat living in numerous places increases ones ability to connect. It is certainly pos...
^^^^
Line 13, column 366, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...for the media, which does often portray many different lifestyles, but living and seeing are t...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, furthermore, if, lastly, look, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2065.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 422.0 442.535393258 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89336492891 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57297089786 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545023696682 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 657.9 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.1159393441 60.3974514979 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.7826086957 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.347826087 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.34782608696 5.21951772744 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281717853654 0.243740707755 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0781721835527 0.0831039109588 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0881584724422 0.0758088955206 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158469480763 0.150359130593 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0855501700127 0.0667264976115 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.