In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.
it goes without saying that the average life expectancy is increased in the last decades especially among developed countries. While some people believe that growing cities and changing people's lifestyles have a negative impact on the health of individuals, the others hold the view that recent advances in science and increasing people knowledge's of health are two factors which make the increase in the average life expectancy. I concur with the latter group's opinion. The reasons to substation my viewpoint are elaborated in the subsequent paragraphs.
First of all, with the progressive advancement in science, the rate of success in treatments is increased. To be more specific, nowadays, there are a lot of modern hospitals with modern equipment in each city even in small cities. In the past people in small cities or rural areas have not accessed health services and hospitals were very far from their living places. There is no secret to anyone that medical science recently has made great progress. As a result, the number of successful surgeries is increased. Also, many diseases that were previously difficult to treat, are easily cured.
Furthermore, people study more than the past and their knowledge in all aspects of science is increased. As a result, people do more pay attention to their meals and older men and women avoid oily foods. To put this notion into a more vivid picture, people do a lot of things to keep up their health like an annual checkup, regular exercise, eating more vegetables and fruits and so on. For instance, my father after retirement planed swimming twice a week and do his annual checkup regularly. He also raises his knowledge about health issues by reading new articles and encourage us to take care of our health.
Considering all the reasons and points mentioned above, one could conclude that recently progresses in science and increasing people's information in the field of health are two main reasons for the increase in the span of people's life.
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- TOEFL T P O 49 - Integrated Writing Task 3
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- TOEFL T P O 49 - Integrated Writing Task 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
it goes without saying that the average li...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, so, while, for instance, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1678.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 331.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06948640483 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64440036612 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.604229607251 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.1377606699 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.875 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6875 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0961378001714 0.236089414692 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0272365656815 0.076458572812 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0307840863143 0.0737576698707 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0639336516884 0.150856017488 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0279068535734 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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