TPO12
Views differ when it comes to people's information and understanding. Some people are inclined toward the opinion that there is more beneficial to be familiar with many academic areas. However, some other may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that having solid knowledge in on specific area are better. In my point of view, there is more merit for people to have academic knowledge of broad subjects.
The first reason worth mentioning is that due to the knowledge of many academic subjects, people can be more successful. These days, development of technology creates alters the old fashioned jobs. In the past day, it was necessary for people to have advance knowledge in one specific field to get a job. Because of that many people focused only on one specific area. Nowadays, the advancement of technology creates new jobs and areas which are different. One of these areas is Data Science which is a new demanding job in every company. This new career has an application in all academic subjects and helps us to achieve better results in that area. Therefore, because of this new situation, a person who has more basic knowledge, have a more rate of success compare to others.
A further more subtle to point out is that study adverse sources of science can help people to understand themself better. nowadays, many people do not have a passion in their life and do not know what their solution is. They get bored easily and many of them study something that their parents told them. Have vast knowledge can help these people since of the way that a person can find his like is to work. He is familiar with many academic subjects. He can spend his time in single area and test all of them. After a while, he can say which one he prefers between them. Therefore, by have a vast understanding of academic subject people can understand themselves better than other. For example, when my brother finished his college education, he was an expert in Civil Engineering. But he was not happy of it since my parent force him to choose this area. He lost his passion in life and after that, he attends different classes and extends his knowledge in other fields. After one year he understands he is passionate about history and decided to study it.
To make a long story short, there are more merits for people to have a vast understanding of academic subjects due to the mentioned reasons in up paragraphs.
- TPO 5 80
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. 66
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?When teachers assign projects on which students must work together, the students learn much moreeffectively than when they are asked to work alone on projects. 73
- Playing computer games is a waste of time Children should not be allowed to play 68
- In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age. 65
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 31, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'people'.
Suggestion: people
Views differ when it comes to peoples information and understanding. Some peo...
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Line 3, column 306, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...dge in one specific field to get a job. Because of that many people focused only on one...
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Line 5, column 124, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Nowadays
...p people to understand themself better. nowadays, many people do not have a passion in t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1992.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74285714286 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5627399506 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485714285714 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 648.0 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.994337845 48.9658058833 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.68 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.52 5.45110844103 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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