tpo24
We know that animal fossils usually provide very little opportunity to study the actual animals tissue, so scientists were very excited. in the passage had said, exposing its insides to reveal materials that seem to be remains of blood vessels, red blood cell, and collagen matrix. in the lecture professor explained that the breaking of the fossilize leg bone and discovery of soft tissue just reveal some material that battery had remained because by passing this long time batteries will make hollow in the bones where blood vessels were once located. also professor expressed that the blood vessels can not remain after this long time so this red materials is discovered by microscopic examination of the various parts of animals body, probably caused by another reason. also there is same explanation about collagen, this materials created y human handling because those can not be remained after passing that long time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 89, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'animals'' or 'animal's'?
Suggestion: animals'; animal's
... little opportunity to study the actual animals tissue, so scientists were very excited...
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Line 1, column 138, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...issue, so scientists were very excited. in the passage had said, exposing its insi...
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Line 1, column 283, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...s, red blood cell, and collagen matrix. in the lecture professor explained that th...
^^
Line 1, column 339, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...rofessor explained that the breaking of the fossilize leg bone and discovery of soft tissue j...
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Line 1, column 556, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
... where blood vessels were once located. also professor expressed that the blood vess...
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Line 1, column 556, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: also,
... where blood vessels were once located. also professor expressed that the blood vess...
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Line 1, column 776, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
...ody, probably caused by another reason. also there is same explanation about collage...
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Line 1, column 776, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: also,
...ody, probably caused by another reason. also there is same explanation about collage...
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Line 1, column 823, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ere is same explanation about collagen, this materials created y human handling beca...
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Line 1, column 871, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this can' or 'those cans'?
Suggestion: this can; those cans
...erials created y human handling because those can not be remained after passing that long...
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Line 1, column 927, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... remained after passing that long time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 7.30242825607 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 22.412803532 58% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 30.3222958057 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 779.0 1373.03311258 57% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 150.0 270.72406181 55% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19333333333 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.49963551158 4.04702891845 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41866813671 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 145.348785872 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.653333333333 0.540411800872 121% => OK
syllable_count: 250.2 419.366225166 60% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.23620309051 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 13.0662251656 38% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 21.2450331126 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.9694251432 49.2860985944 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.8 110.228320801 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.0 21.698381199 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.6 7.06452816374 23% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.09492273731 24% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 4.19205298013 262% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.445707134945 0.272083759551 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.232938060029 0.0996497079465 234% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0847388645823 0.0662205650399 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.445707134945 0.162205337803 275% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 13.3589403974 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.57 53.8541721854 60% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.0289183223 147% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.2367328918 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.86 8.42419426049 117% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 63.6247240618 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.498013245 133% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
Read sample essays from ETS:
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More content wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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