The diagrams below show how chocolate is made and how the process of chocolate is divided up among those involved in the process.Summarise the information by choosing and reporting the key features, and make any relevant comparisons.

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The diagrams below show how chocolate is made and how the process of chocolate is divided up among those involved in the process.

Summarise the information by choosing and reporting the key features, and make any relevant comparisons.

These two diagrams show the process of chocolate production and the distribution of chocolate bar’s price among stakeholders.

The first step in chocolate production process is grinding of cocoa to produce cocoa liquir and some wastes. The cocoa liquir is then handled in two different ways. Firstly, it can be pressed to get cocoa powder and cocoa butter. The cocoa powder later can be sold onto food industry. Secondly, the cocoa liquir, along with the cocoa butter, sugar, and other ingredients; also can be used for industrial chocolate which produces chocolate bar.

How the price of a chocolate bar is divided up is exposed in the pie chart. It obviously can be seen that the biggest proportion is for ingredients and overheads, take 37% of the price, and followed by supermarket which receives 34%. Next places are taken by chocolate company and tax that get 15% and 10% respectively. Finally, it is only 4% of the price that goes to farmer, who produces the cocoa bean.

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