Some people believe that entertainers are paid too much and their impact on the society is negative, while others disagree and believe that they deserve the money they make because of their positive effect on others. Discuss both views and give your opinion?
Whilst it is true to say that celebrities have a significant action on the society, other people are of the belief that they do not deserve what they acquire, as the impact on the community is negative. I am strongly agreed with the supporters of the effective role of entertainers and consider them as influencers. Both ideas will be explained below on detail.
On the one hand, opponents of positive impact of entertainers said that many of morals and social behavior were destroyed. Because there are many youngsters became introvert and isolated from their families, because they made celebrities as a mentor for them. For example, children in Egypt become loved with actors and replay their actions; however they did bad habits like abuse people, as we saw in social media. Furthermore, fathers and mothers have lost their control on youngsters and they become learned from their model roles like celebrities.
On the other hand, supporters of the important impact of entertainers say that merits gained from them outweigh the disadvantages. Hence, they encourage youth to be healthy; they always advise youngsters to make sports like jogging in order to maintain their body healthier. For example, Mohamed Salah" the Egyptian player" made a campaign with the help of the ministry of social solidarity to persuade adults to stop smoking and practice healthy sports. It will be an effective impact, when influencers talk to youth and inspire people's dreams.
In conclusion, after this essay explained both sides of the debate, my own feeling is that entertainers can indeed be useful for the community, with the influence that leads to a highly response from celebrities' advices.
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1431.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22262773723 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79789933988 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.587591240876 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2357335354 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.25 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8333333333 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.83333333333 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242117863896 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.085415620599 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514014936184 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137118074152 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0611917876715 0.056905535591 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.57 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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